Hey DC, great job as usual with v0.9c – the game is really beginning to get meat on its bones. Have some more ideas for you:
1. MC Room Idea (Telescope) - you should probably reorder the options so that they are grouped to either Mia or Erik’s house as they are a bit jumbled together right now. While we are on the subject, how does the telescope bypass Erik’s house to look into Mia’s? Shouldn’t the PC’s house be somewhere behind/in front of both houses instead, say where the block of three houses are?
2. MC Room Idea (Midnight Checkup) – the Mother will check-in on the PC at night, possibly linked to homework stages. The Mom will come in, tell her son not to stay up too late and kiss him on the forehead. In addition/instead, if the PC goes to bed with at least one bar of day left, he will see the mother lean down over him to kiss him on the forehead, possibly leading to an inadvertent opening of her robe. Once the Mother seduction quest is at the oral stage, the checkups can turn sexual, with the Mother giving the PC a hand job while he suckles at her breasts. I imagine that any actual sex will take place in each NPC’s respective rooms, but I think that if the game will have threesomes, then the Sister can come in during one such checkup and confront the PC and Mother, possibly joining in.
A) Bathroom/Shower Idea (MC House) – I think there should be at least one scene of the Mother or Sister walking in on the PC showering leading to their first view of the nude PC, with a different version if they are seduced where they join the PC in the stall for some hands-on cleaning. One other idea involving the mother, but this necessitates the Mother having a hairy bush – basically, the PC walks in on the mother showering and if the conditions are met (I imagine oral at the least), she asks the PC to help her shave… leading to the PC giving oral sex in the shower.
3. Mia Introductory School Dialog – I think you need to fix the dialog as it implies only the weekend has passed rather than at least the week the PC has been missing from school.
4. NPC/Object Labels – would it be possible to add some more visual markers to indicate what is or isn’t selectable? For the NPC’s maybe at least add some text over their heads with their names?
5. NPC stand-in’s – The addition of these separate NPC’s is a really good idea, and may I just say how much I like the Coach Bridget NPC pose?
6. Lopes and Martinez – I found a small bug where they will talk about being in trouble before the PC even gets caught by Annie. Perhaps have them appear on the second day to fix this? I also think it might be a good idea for them to be in the Mall during the day, and part of the crowd at the Park during the night (probably a good idea to have something similar for most of the NPC’s).
7. Mrs. Bisette – I think there needs to be some ramp-up between being a “kind and caring teacher” in her intro and “the seductress on the prowl” after delivering the first homework. While there are numerous examples of Female teachers acting in this way, I think you might need to add at least one scene indicating the ramp-up of sexual intention – for example, after the scene with the principal, the PC, in such a haste to escape the office (could be some other thing like being pushed by Dexter), accidentally knocks down Mrs. Bisette, ending up between her legs and his head on her chest. While getting up, the PC rubs up against her nether regions, thus giving her a “feel” of what’s under the PC’s shorts and implanting the idea for seducing the PC.
8. Consum-r – you may consider adding an NPC here, someone that can be seduced to give the PC a discount on the prices. Also, once one-time quest items are purchased, perhaps have them disappear from the options or have a message box appear that tells the player that they already purchased that item?
9. Cassie – I strongly suggest for you to take another look over the way the PC is allowed to swim/interact with Cassie during the day. I’m not really sure why the PC seeing Cassie in the nude on her night swim somehow unbans him and leads to gloryhole fun – in fact, if anything, I imagine it would make someone even angrier. At the moment, I can’t really come up with an alternative but I do think you need one.
10. Helen (Mia’s Mother) – so for some reason I couldn’t help thinking about a scene in the movie Real Genius (1985), where a prank is played on an antagonistic character named Kent. Kent has braces, and (if I remember correctly) a miniature speaker/mic is attached so that the prankers can listen to what he is saying and if they speak for only him to hear it. How about something similar, where the PC add something to an item Helen carries around which can lead to some interesting ideas - I picture the replacement occurring at night when visiting Mia, and should look like the scene in Raiders of the Lost Ark when Indiana Jones replaces the idol with a bag only to trigger the booby-trap anyway (the PC imagines himself dressed like Indy). Just off the top of my head, she is told to loosen up her behavior towards her family; that she should be nude when praying (blah, blah, blah… sinful to hide her body from view), stuff along those lines. I have an additional idea, but I’ll move it to its own section. I don’t know if the PC should get to screw her, but at least the PC will see the husband doing so. BTW, if anyone would be pissed at the unisex locker room it would be Helen.
11. Reverend and Mrs. Wilks Idea – so this is a semi-continuation of the Helen idea. Basically, the good Reverend is a sleaze ball who likes making peoples live difficult to make himself feel better – he’s a charlatan and uses his pulpit as a weapon rather than actually believing in anything and trying to makes parishioners lives better. The PC becomes involved when the MC’s mother goes to Church and asks him to tag along. Seeing easy prey, the preached delivers a speech about those who commit suicide and those who are LGBT going to Hell, etc. Seeking revenge, the PC decides to get some blackmail material and can follow him around town. I picture this section like the South Park episode “Butters' Very Own Episode”. The PC finds the Wilks entering a bathhouse and can follow him in. Now, the M/M content is optional here, but the PC can wind up getting oral sex from Wilks. Either way, the PC winds up with some photos of the Wilks obviously in sexual congress with another man. This leads us to Wilk’s wife. For now, let’s call her Jane. Jane is a meek, mousy wife that is silent, but when the Reverend is distracted she walks over and hugs the PC’s mother. The PC decides to give the incriminating evidence to Jane who is outraged that he is cheating on her… again. This time, she wants revenge. Now, I picture this is a revenge cuckolding scenario (she will leave him if he doesn’t, probably exposing him as well) with Wilks being “forced” to participate, possibly in his wife’s underwear. I can try and expand on this scenario further, but frankly, I’m not that great of a writer, but I can give it a shot if you need. With Jane now in control, Wilks calms down and even likes the changes to his life, culminating in an apology to the MC’s mother.
12. Doc Brown (analogue) – so for whatever reason, the MC reminds me of Marty from Back to the Future. Once that got in my head, I had another idea that allows a way to add in some bizarre inventions for the PC to use. Now, Doc Brown can be a teacher at the school; a friendly neighbor; or possibly somehow related to the MC (an uncle on the father’s side perhaps?) – maybe even all three. I picture most of these inventions going hilariously wrong (for example: he soups up the bike which accidentally (and temporarily) send the PC back in time to when Dinosaurs roamed the Earth) before eventually working out the kinks.
13. Locker Room Webcam Idea – I want to suggest adding a part to the scene where the PC finds another webcam already in place. I suggest this as it opens up some avenues in discovering who placed it.
Thanks for reading, and really looking forward to the next version!
Do you plan to add branching storylines for each character as their relationships develop? It would add quite a lot to replay, and allow for catering to a lot more fetishes/kinks in different ways!
