This was so so charming! Thank you for writing so much for Clem, i love the way you write her. it seems youre rewriting/changing some things? Either way, I hope it'll make it in :3
Clementine Pregnancy Expansion [Summitted]
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Thank you for the kind words, they mean a lot.
My apologizes for the confusion, I'm rewriting the entire doc. It seems you just now read my expansion for Clementine, after I've rewritten most scenes. Before, the end product was rushed and very sloppy. Currently, I'm rewriting the "sleep with" scenes and after that I will be tackling the sex scenes. Sadly, it will still be awhile till I'm satisfied to resubmit for review, but please keep an eye on this thread. When I'm done with rewriting and editing the toolbars, I'll ask for some kind forum members to look through the doc. Giving me some help with editing and criticism.
Again, thank you for the kind words, it really means a lot. Have a wonderful day and stay safe.
I apologize for the lack of news. I've sadly been busy with important matters this entire month and unfortunately getting sick as well. Looking at the recent patch notes, Clementine has gotten a new scene (congratulations to the author!). I was planning to have a cowgirl scene in my doc but I will have to greatly change this now.
I will not lie. I'm deeply stressed out. I've been working on this doc for the past year and I really don't want it to be in vain. As of now, I will be putting all my effort into getting the doc done and resubmitted.
Again, my deepest apologizes for the lack of news. Many people, not just on this forum, are very excited to see this expansion get in. I don't want to let everyone down. Have a wonderful day and stay safe.
I will not lie. I'm deeply stressed out. I've been working on this doc for the past year and I really don't want it to be in vain. As of now, I will be putting all my effort into getting the doc done and resubmitted.
Again, my deepest apologizes for the lack of news. Many people, not just on this forum, are very excited to see this expansion get in. I don't want to let everyone down. Have a wonderful day and stay safe.
Quick Update: I've rewritten all the "sleep with" scenes and I've gone through the doc and fixed/improved the tooltips. Hopefully, it looks much better now.
The next things I have to rewrite are all the sex scenes and the post sex scene. Unfortunately (only for me) Clementine now has a cowgirl scene, so I've decided to change my cowgirl scene to a pregnant version. Which is disappointing because that's my favorite position and I was really looking forward to rewriting it. Maybe in the future I'll write a rough version or something.
Another thing of note, my friend (the artist) has agreed to do a recommission. They will probably message me in mid July or so. Fingers crossed they are still up for it, but I was wondering if anyone could give me some pointers about commissioning pregnancy art. They would like some pointers and tips on how exactly to draw pregnancy stuff. As they are still new to this kind of stuff.
I'll try to get another update out soon but there is a lot of stuff for me to rewrite and I still have no idea if I'm doing the Parsers right. I've just been winging it, anytime I ask for help I get ghosted and the online parser tester doesn't work for me.
Regardless, thank you for reading and have a wonderful day!
The next things I have to rewrite are all the sex scenes and the post sex scene. Unfortunately (only for me) Clementine now has a cowgirl scene, so I've decided to change my cowgirl scene to a pregnant version. Which is disappointing because that's my favorite position and I was really looking forward to rewriting it. Maybe in the future I'll write a rough version or something.
Another thing of note, my friend (the artist) has agreed to do a recommission. They will probably message me in mid July or so. Fingers crossed they are still up for it, but I was wondering if anyone could give me some pointers about commissioning pregnancy art. They would like some pointers and tips on how exactly to draw pregnancy stuff. As they are still new to this kind of stuff.
I'll try to get another update out soon but there is a lot of stuff for me to rewrite and I still have no idea if I'm doing the Parsers right. I've just been winging it, anytime I ask for help I get ghosted and the online parser tester doesn't work for me.
Regardless, thank you for reading and have a wonderful day!
Quick Update: I've rewritten a few scenes, improved some others and finally after a year of working on this doc. I added a proper introduction to the beginning.
I wrote a new sex scene, Mating press and added preg variations. I also tried to rewrite and improve an older scene, but I'm not too happy with the end result (the scene involves a heavily pregnant clementine waking up the PC and riding you until the sun rises). I'll look back at it when I'm done with the other sex scenes.
Some appearance descriptions of the different stages of pregnancy were updated and slightly changed.
A small introduction was added to the beginning of the doc. With details on how to contact me and a content warning.
This was simply a quick update and just letting everyone know I'm still working on the doc. Four more scenes and I'll start asking for proofing reading and edits before resubmitting for review. No updates will come for a while. I just wanna get these next scenes done with. Unless I'm able to commission art. Thank you for reading and have a wonderful day!
I wrote a new sex scene, Mating press and added preg variations. I also tried to rewrite and improve an older scene, but I'm not too happy with the end result (the scene involves a heavily pregnant clementine waking up the PC and riding you until the sun rises). I'll look back at it when I'm done with the other sex scenes.
Some appearance descriptions of the different stages of pregnancy were updated and slightly changed.
A small introduction was added to the beginning of the doc. With details on how to contact me and a content warning.
This was simply a quick update and just letting everyone know I'm still working on the doc. Four more scenes and I'll start asking for proofing reading and edits before resubmitting for review. No updates will come for a while. I just wanna get these next scenes done with. Unless I'm able to commission art. Thank you for reading and have a wonderful day!
Wow this has really come along, 80+ pages? It seems better already even as it's not done being edited yet, great stuff!
Edit: “T-Thats not the point! You’re still playing with magic to satisfy your weird degenerate fantasies!” amazing call out, 10/10
Edit: “T-Thats not the point! You’re still playing with magic to satisfy your weird degenerate fantasies!” amazing call out, 10/10
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Errrr, I'm hoping something like this will only be under the "Silly mode". Spoils the immersion a bit, for my taste.
Hello everyone!
It's been a while, so I'm just doing a quick update. My job has been kicking my ass, but I'm still working on the doc.
Most importantly, Strawberry_tea has approved all content and was very supporting. The mating press and pregnant cowgirl scenes have been finished (plus pregnancy variants). I'm finishing up the doggystyle pregnancy variants. Only stages 3 and 4 are left. After that, the doc is mostly finished. Before I ask for help with editing and criticism, I'm going to comb through the doc frantically, trying to fix any mistakes or misused words. Lastly, I've commissioned art, and it looks wonderful. While it's not done yet, I'm very happy with the busts so far.
On another note, I would like to give a thank you to Strawberry_tea for allowing me to keep writing for best girl Clementine. Along with ScaleTail, for generously allowing me to write a pregnant cowgirl scene.
Thank you for reading, be safe and have a wonderful day!
It's been a while, so I'm just doing a quick update. My job has been kicking my ass, but I'm still working on the doc.
Most importantly, Strawberry_tea has approved all content and was very supporting. The mating press and pregnant cowgirl scenes have been finished (plus pregnancy variants). I'm finishing up the doggystyle pregnancy variants. Only stages 3 and 4 are left. After that, the doc is mostly finished. Before I ask for help with editing and criticism, I'm going to comb through the doc frantically, trying to fix any mistakes or misused words. Lastly, I've commissioned art, and it looks wonderful. While it's not done yet, I'm very happy with the busts so far.
On another note, I would like to give a thank you to Strawberry_tea for allowing me to keep writing for best girl Clementine. Along with ScaleTail, for generously allowing me to write a pregnant cowgirl scene.
Thank you for reading, be safe and have a wonderful day!
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After a long year of college, being financially fucked over by friends and family alike, and working a soul-crushing minimum wage job. The Clementine Pregnnacy expansion is finally finished. At 100 pages and around 50k words.
Just a note about my health and the future of this doc. I know most of you don't really give a shit, so feel free to skip and just look at the list of content, link to the doc and art below:
The writing is amateurish, in the best light. I humbly ask anyone willing to leave a comment on the doc to help me with grammar and editing, as well give me your brutal, unfiltered thoughts. I want to improve the doc to the best I can before resubmitting for review. The parsering is abysmal and still needs changes. I'm sure I fucked something up. If anyone is willing to help with that, it would be most appreciated.
The main focus of the doc was, of course, a normal repeatable pregnancy: belly rubs, interactions with your children, etc. However, I wrote a unique mechanic that allows the PC to knock up Clementine with a litter of lambs, extending her pregnancy and giving her more content, only if you have high cum production/virility. This was inspired by the codex for sheepfolk and Noire, who has a similar mechanic. It is completely optional and approved by Strawberry_tea.
Now onto the main bits of content:
Mating press (Non-preg version with preg variations 2-4)
Pregnant Cowgirl (preg variations 2-4)
Doggystyle (Non-preg version with preg variations 2-4)
Typical pregnancy content: Intro scene first time and repeat
Pregnancy talk (preg variations 1-4)
Talk to Clementine about your children
Belly rubs! (preg variations 1-4)
Spending time with your children, either walking through town or harassing Clementine for more cookies
Sleeping with Clementine (preg variations 1-4) and 3 wake up scenes. 2 of the 3 have preg variations.
That's the majority of the content. I wanted to make sure the pregnancy mattered and actually changed (most) scenes depending on the stage.
Now I would like to give several thanks to different community members/devs for their help.
Most importantly, to Strawberry_tea for allowing me to continue writing for Clementine. They were supportive of the project and kind enough to allow the weird pregnancy stuff to stay in.
A thank you to Gardeford for reviewing the doc last year and giving me criticism. Along with ScaleTail for allowing me to write a pregnant cowgirl scene.
Finally, a massive thank you to Jstar. For over the past year, I'm sure I annoyed them half to death with all my questions and dms. Even if this doc is rejected and not up to standards, all that support and kindness meant a lot.
I'm not really confident in the doc, especially compared to the other writers, but please leave your thoughts and opinions. I have commissioned art; it is not done yet. I'll post all the art whenever I know the doc is rejected or accepted.
Thank you for reading this, for giving some random dumbass on the internet a little bit of your time. Have a wonderful day and stay safe.
Clementine Pregnancy Expansion
PS a little teaser (ART NOT FINAL EXPECT CHANGES)
Just a note about my health and the future of this doc. I know most of you don't really give a shit, so feel free to skip and just look at the list of content, link to the doc and art below:
My health, physically and mentally, has been sadly deteriorating over the course of this year. Losing weight, sleep and, most importantly, I've sadly started to have panic attacks again. They haven't been an issue for years until I started writing this doc. And the most defeating thing, a close family member has been diagnosed with cancer this month. After some thought and talk with loved ones/close friends, I've decided that if the doc is rejected again, I will not try to rewrite or make a major attempt to get the doc into the game. All this coupled together with some incredibly dis-encouraging discord messages, I'm simply no longer passionate about this expansion. I do not want pity, I'm simply being honest about my thoughts on this project and the future of this content. If I simply disappear without a word, then I'm probably dealing with these matters.
The writing is amateurish, in the best light. I humbly ask anyone willing to leave a comment on the doc to help me with grammar and editing, as well give me your brutal, unfiltered thoughts. I want to improve the doc to the best I can before resubmitting for review. The parsering is abysmal and still needs changes. I'm sure I fucked something up. If anyone is willing to help with that, it would be most appreciated.
The main focus of the doc was, of course, a normal repeatable pregnancy: belly rubs, interactions with your children, etc. However, I wrote a unique mechanic that allows the PC to knock up Clementine with a litter of lambs, extending her pregnancy and giving her more content, only if you have high cum production/virility. This was inspired by the codex for sheepfolk and Noire, who has a similar mechanic. It is completely optional and approved by Strawberry_tea.
Now onto the main bits of content:
Mating press (Non-preg version with preg variations 2-4)
Pregnant Cowgirl (preg variations 2-4)
Doggystyle (Non-preg version with preg variations 2-4)
Typical pregnancy content: Intro scene first time and repeat
Pregnancy talk (preg variations 1-4)
Talk to Clementine about your children
Belly rubs! (preg variations 1-4)
Spending time with your children, either walking through town or harassing Clementine for more cookies
Sleeping with Clementine (preg variations 1-4) and 3 wake up scenes. 2 of the 3 have preg variations.
That's the majority of the content. I wanted to make sure the pregnancy mattered and actually changed (most) scenes depending on the stage.
Now I would like to give several thanks to different community members/devs for their help.
Most importantly, to Strawberry_tea for allowing me to continue writing for Clementine. They were supportive of the project and kind enough to allow the weird pregnancy stuff to stay in.
A thank you to Gardeford for reviewing the doc last year and giving me criticism. Along with ScaleTail for allowing me to write a pregnant cowgirl scene.
Finally, a massive thank you to Jstar. For over the past year, I'm sure I annoyed them half to death with all my questions and dms. Even if this doc is rejected and not up to standards, all that support and kindness meant a lot.
I'm not really confident in the doc, especially compared to the other writers, but please leave your thoughts and opinions. I have commissioned art; it is not done yet. I'll post all the art whenever I know the doc is rejected or accepted.
Thank you for reading this, for giving some random dumbass on the internet a little bit of your time. Have a wonderful day and stay safe.
Clementine Pregnancy Expansion
PS a little teaser (ART NOT FINAL EXPECT CHANGES)
Glad to hear you persevered and made headway. I've held off on looking at the doc since, One, I like the little sheep and want to be surprised, as Two, you had your own editor and probably didn't need multiple voices in your ear. So I am conflicted if I should jump in and hunt for typos or not.
Either way, You've reached a checkpoint and you should enjoy the feeling of creating something.
Either way, You've reached a checkpoint and you should enjoy the feeling of creating something.
Thank you everyone, for the kind words
I would like to thank A1teros and TheIrishOtaku for leaving a fair amount of comments on the doc. It really means a lot. I know the doc is rather long, and many mistakes are bound to pop up. In hindsight, they were obvious mistakes that I should've gotten sooner.
My last post was rather gloomy in tone. I think it would be best if I take a small break from the doc. Again, all the support means the most. I would've given up a long time ago if it wasn't for the kind words.
I would like to thank A1teros and TheIrishOtaku for leaving a fair amount of comments on the doc. It really means a lot. I know the doc is rather long, and many mistakes are bound to pop up. In hindsight, they were obvious mistakes that I should've gotten sooner.
My last post was rather gloomy in tone. I think it would be best if I take a small break from the doc. Again, all the support means the most. I would've given up a long time ago if it wasn't for the kind words.
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I've had to take out the mating press scene and submit it separately. It will take a long time before I know if the expansion is going to be accepted or not.
So I'm just gonna post all the art I commissioned. Thank you for the support and have a wonderful day.
So I'm just gonna post all the art I commissioned. Thank you for the support and have a wonderful day.
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Any reason? Just still more work to get it polished and didn't want to hold up the rest? Or did you accidently turn her into a monster in that scene?
I see that in those spoilered art images, some of her eyes have tiny, little demon tail tips in them... little, upside-down, spade-like shapes like demon tails have...
I'm not a trusted writer, and with the large amount of content to review (80+ pages), I was told to submit a smaller scene before they would consider the pregnancy expansion. I hope I didn't mess up that badly with Clementine's character.
On your second point, my apologizes but I think your overthinking the art. It's merely the artist's style.
Thank you. I'm glad people are enjoying the art. It was well worth the money.
Yes, it is a repeatable pregnancy. I also wrote some interactions with your children as well.
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Genuine question for anyone who has read my expansion. Did I properly write Clementine's character?
I was doing some reading on the discord and I saw a few people raised some concerns that I did not execute her character well and that she shouldn't have a pregnancy expansion in the first place. I tried to keep her personality consistent while pregnant and after having children.
Please give me your honest thoughts.
Clementine Pregnancy Expansion
I was doing some reading on the discord and I saw a few people raised some concerns that I did not execute her character well and that she shouldn't have a pregnancy expansion in the first place. I tried to keep her personality consistent while pregnant and after having children.
Please give me your honest thoughts.
Clementine Pregnancy Expansion
This is kinda funny but even moreso weird to see said considering people were literally biting for her to get pregnant like everyone else for a long long time.
It was just a random old comment from someone who wrote for Clementine before. I actually asked them about it and they were incredibly chill about it. Even giving their best wishes to the expansion. Just felt like a weird comment.
After lurking around the forums and discord for a while, I've seen a surprising amount of people have asked for Clementine to get a pregnancy expansion. I'm just hoping I don't fail to meet their expectations.
It might be Clementine cursing? I admit I was surprised but as it turns out she actually does curse in her existing content too. Ace's suggestions probably cover character and tone better than mine, all my suggestions were just grammar cleanup.
Edit: I think all her cursing is during sex so maybe it is out of character in conversation.
Edit: I think all her cursing is during sex so maybe it is out of character in conversation.
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That surprised me as well. Matter of fact, I went out of my way to make sure she didn't curse. However, after replaying her content to the point of exhaustion, I concluded she's just blunt/passionate when talking about subjects, even if she's adorably unware of how much she rants. Although this was foreshadowed in her introduction.
It's been several months since I've played the game (waiting for the dreaded review lol). I'll refresh myself to her content and ask the discord for a second opinion. If it's out of character, I'll try my best to improve it.
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I have started reading it. I have to drive back to Florida from Texas, hoping this hurricane doesn't cause issues. I have only just gotten to the sex scenes. Corrected what typo or grammar issues I noticed.
So far, Clementine's dialogue isn't jarring or really out of place. I don't think the swears really fit or add things to her where they are, but that's just an opinion. I think her potty mouth should mostly show while she's being mind-broken on a massive and completely natural and not at all player-overcompensating meat rod. Where she just loses all sanity, rather than being nervous or shy or timid. None of the parts so far were really overt or egregious, I offered some alternatives, but that's all they are, suggestions.
I think that maybe once she and Champ become an official item and she asks if she can call them 'sweetheart' you started to use it every single time instead of [pc.name] or some [pc.mf] where you could switch it up with 'dear' or 'sweetie' or 'stud' or 'love'. Not saying change them all, just do a CTRL-F search for 'sweetheart' and maybe swap a few (again, still only a couple pages in).
As an aside, some of the Champ dialogue is a bit specific in intonation. I am not saying that what you have being said (ie. in quotes, rather than implied) isn't what most people would accept, but there's definitely room for doing some [pc.isDK] checks or [pc.dcb] parsers and adding some flavor to account for certain reader's Champ's personalities. It's fine for now, you have a great framework, and that would just be adding some furnishings to the project. I didn't want to add in those suggestions yet without you saying you were okay with it (since that's more work for you), but it's an option to keep in mind where you can add things for how a Dark Knight would say or react or how a Bimbo would react as opposed to a baseline Champion.
Example "Clementine sniffles and cries as she sees the answer on your face. [pc.dcb|You look away slightly, not in sadness, but because two things happen when you see a girl crying in your arms. First you have an orgasm and then you fall asleep.|It almost breaks your heart to see the little sheep girl so sad.|Your heart flutters in your chest as you see the wooly little cutie-pie so sad. You want to cuddle and hug and console your fluffy friend but struggle to find the right words.] "I hope we can still be friends," you manage to whisper.'
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NGL, I'd love to assist with a scene where both Clem and Drifa are hanging out, doing an activity with champ. They're both shy yet sweet beans that live in Hawkethorne.
Would a scene with both of them still be viable, since my drifa is currently staying at the wayfort??