Clementine Pregnancy Expansion [Summitted]

[Jstar]

Would a scene with both of them still be viable, since my drifa is currently staying at the wayfort??

There could still be reasons you could have her in a scene at Hawkethorn, such as her visiting her family (or kids) at the time

 

[OreoLuma]

There could still be reasons you could have her in a scene at Hawkethorn, such as her visiting her family (or kids) at the time

NGL, I'd love to assist with a scene where both Clem and Drifa are hanging out, doing an activity with champ. They're both shy yet sweet beans that live in Hawkethorne.

That sounds great, but I'm not sure how it would work. Maybe both women drag the PC on a date? Clementine hanging out with other people would really build her character, but I don't think a threesome would fit Clementine's nature (I could be wrong about this, not to mention all the preg variations). Plus, I still have to get all my work reviewed.

This does sound fun. I'll message you about it when I get done editing my main doc.

 

[OreoLuma]

I just finished editing/going through suggestions. I'll start adding dark knight/bimbo parsers whenever I get the chance.

Before the main doc can be reviewed, I have to get a sex scene approved first. So I decided to remove the mating press scene and submit it separately. If anyone is willing to help with the expansion. Please visit the mating press doc first so the review can go over more smoothly.

Coc2: Clementine Mating press scene

Thank you for the support and have a wonderful day!

 

[Ace Hangman]

I just finished editing/going through suggestions. I'll start adding dark knight/bimbo parsers whenever I get the chance.

The CoC2 wiki page for Clementine surprisingly has some Dark Knight and Bimbo examples in it (which a lot of pages don't).
They're just little changes that would show up in her Appearance, but could be helpful. Also, one of the options not to Cuddle has a [silly] practically ordering the reader to select the Cuddle option instead.

I will make a note for any spots I (meaning it's just one person's opinion) see that might have a spot for a DK or Bimbo blurb, but ultimately some will just be silly thoughts I had while reading and should be considered before blindly accepting them.
[eyeshifts]

The Parser documention is also a good place to get some parser examples when needed.

 

[Ace Hangman]

Got through the first sex scene of the Pregnancy expansion. Started on the single Mating Press doc.
Made a suggestion or two... three at the most, I'm sure.
Mostly, I'd have suggested not making three or four different copies of the scene for each pregStage, but instead using one as a template and just adding in the differences. You'd have a lot more parsers in there (but you can use the Highlight option to put each one in a different color for ease of reference). However, since you already have them all written out at this, probably be just as much work to consolidate them now, the only issue being the extra time to read through duplicates of a scene and also have to correct grammar or misspellings and such shared between all of them.
I'll try and read through more later on.

 

[OreoLuma]

Got through the first sex scene of the Pregnancy expansion. Started on the single Mating Press doc.
Made a suggestion or two... three at the most, I'm sure.
Mostly, I'd have suggested not making three or four different copies of the scene for each pregStage, but instead using one as a template and just adding in the differences. You'd have a lot more parsers in there (but you can use the Highlight option to put each one in a different color for ease of reference). However, since you already have them all written out at this, probably be just as much work to consolidate them now, the only issue being the extra time to read through duplicates of a scene and also have to correct grammar or misspellings and such shared between all of them.
I'll try and read through more later on.

My apologizes, I wanted to make sure each pregnancy stage had content and each scene had distinct variations.

Your help is much appreciated. I'll go through all the suggestions whenever I get the chance.

 

[Ace Hangman]

Finished the Mating Press document. I made notes on any typos, suggestions, or likely spots to input some magicock or dark knight parsers.

My apologizes, I wanted to make sure each pregnancy stage had content and each scene had distinct variations.

I know the reason. As an editor who gets anywhere from $0.01 to a jaw-dropping $0.02 a word (usually $0.015) depending on document length and technical/lore/rules knowledge required, I am just saying that while making duplicate sections as opposed to a template section with [pregStage] parsers just used for the variants might seem easier to read and see the difference, it'll save you lots of money, like... maybe even $10. You can use the Highlight Text option to set the different parsers off in color to make them easier to ... well... parse.

Aside from that, it tends to burn out editors when they have to not only reread sections after corrections, but have to reread (nearly) identical sections, which tend to have all the same typos and issues and such. Obviously nothing to be done about it here, but just saying having one section with
'You reach and press your hand to Clementine's [clementine.pregStage 0 2 3 4|trim|slightly-curved|full and rounded|impressively gravid] tummy.' will save you both cash, and editor burn-out (and keep the sections consistent in case an error isn't pointed out in the third mirror section like it was in the first two times around).

Anyhoo, I hope it helps. Let me know if you need another look through.

 

[Ace Hangman]

Read through the new, condensed Mating Press document. Much shorter and a lot less hunting and searching through identical sections to correct typos or grammar, just within a single parser. I noted any typos, grammar, and a few suggestions. Some is opinion, just one person's. Others may disagree.

 

[OreoLuma]

Just doing a quick update, as it's been way overdue. The mating press scene has been accepted and is ready to code.

I'm currently working on the doggystyle scene and will submit it soon. After that, I just have to fix all the parser issues in the main doc, and hopefully, I can wrap up this expansion.

Thank you for all the support and help (especially to Ace Hangman and A1teros, they have been a massive help), have a wonderful day and be safe!

 

[OreoLuma]

Unfortunately, I'm extremely sick right now. However, this has given me a lot more free time, so instead of tossing and turning in bed, I decided to fix the main doc.

Most of the parsers should be fixed, italics/bold text removed, and I did proper indenting as well. There are surely some issues, like spaces that need to be removed and other grammar issues. But hopefully, well after a year of starting this expansion, it's finally close to being done.

If you wish to take a look at the doc, please feel free to. Any help with editing or grammar is much appreciated.

Clementine Pregnancy Expansion

Thank you and have a wonderful day!

 

[OreoLuma]

On a side note, if all this goes well.

What kind of content would you folks want from me?

I have two current ideas. I'm not sure if it's allowed, but I'll just air out my thoughts.

The first idea is a half sheepfolk, half Boreal Elf character that moves into Hawkethorne after the events of the winter city.

The second idea hit me after I saw a piece of art that really inspired me. I would like to write a follower/summon character that resides in the PC's soul. A tall, semi-ethereal woman with a mysterious past. Her body fused with a thick suit of armor. (Yes, this is just an excuse to write a tall sexy woman in armor because I find that hot.)

I know it's really weird and I don't have much hope of either idea being allowed, but after writing for Clementine for so long. I really need something else to refresh myself.

 

[Ace Hangman]

The second idea hit me after I saw a piece of art that really inspired me. I would like to write a follower/summon character that resides in the PC's soul. A tall, semi-ethereal woman with a mysterious past. Her body fused with a thick suit of armor. (Yes, this is just an excuse to write a tall sexy woman in armor because I find that hot.)

You could always just write a tall, sexy woman on armor.

 

[OreoLuma]

You could always just write a tall, sexy woman on armor.

Eh, the ethereal part is what makes the idea unique. It also gives me an excuse to keep the characters' armor on during more intimate moments.