[WIP]Embry Expac - Monkees in Space
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Marriage isn't included in the expac, mostly cause I'm undecided how to handle the parental reconciliation and the actual wedding scene yet. I'm just laying the foundation now so I don't have to go back later and make edits. Changing stuff once it's coded is much harder.
I've decided the kids will have big ears, a tail, furred arms like Embry and human feet.
I've decided the kids will have big ears, a tail, furred arms like Embry and human feet.
"No Embry I don't know how rare Savicite is, because I get jumped by a mining machine every 3 steps and it drops this stuff like candy. At this point I think I am the largest supplier of this stuff in the galaxy." Sorry couldn't help my self for a rare thing it is rather easy to get. That said good so far.
looking at this, i have a few complaints:
steele is waaaaaaaaaay too sugary, it's really off as far as tone. while Embry interactions had some cheese to them before, this is too much
also holy hell this is too long for what would be one of your first submissions, without any other previous works accepted
steele is waaaaaaaaaay too sugary, it's really off as far as tone. while Embry interactions had some cheese to them before, this is too much
also holy hell this is too long for what would be one of your first submissions, without any other previous works accepted
"Embry, we're married now."
"Oh, I, ah, um, oh my..."
And that's how you married Embry.
"Oh, I, ah, um, oh my..."
And that's how you married Embry.
Isn't that highly subjective criticism? What do you consider Steele's "normal tone"?
Would a hardened steele be so cutesy? Would a mischevious steele be coy? Or would they be asshat/uncaring/rude, as depicted before.
As for the subjectivity, it absolutely is criticism towards personality hijacking. Steele, for the most part, is left with vague dialogue that the player fills in. When you take over that said dialogue, you need to have a thorough understanding of what exactly that entails. Since everything is kept in a mono tone, it's safe to say that Steele's persona is indeed under Maye's, not the player's, control
Mischievous would indeed be coy. They're neither too hard nor too soft, so playing coy and being a terrible tease fits. As for Hard PCs, I don't think Embry is the kind of character they'd normally go for in the first place, at least not in a "go for it and stay with it" kind of way. You don't play an asshole to have a cute romance. You play an asshole for the sake of being an asshole and this content expansion caters, from what I saw, to people who like their fluffy feel-good romance in space.
Consider it the reverse situation for people who're way into hard doms that don't do anything for people with a different disposition. I for one absolutely hate it when NPCs treat my PC like shit, so I don't bother interacting with them once I know. If Embry is too soft for you, there's plenty of other fish in the sea.
As for the dialogue, that can always be adjusted in the editing process and highlighted during evaluation, I'd assume.
Consider it the reverse situation for people who're way into hard doms that don't do anything for people with a different disposition. I for one absolutely hate it when NPCs treat my PC like shit, so I don't bother interacting with them once I know. If Embry is too soft for you, there's plenty of other fish in the sea.
As for the dialogue, that can always be adjusted in the editing process and highlighted during evaluation, I'd assume.
Jim had some definite moments of sweetness overload, i'll give you that. And yes, hard dommes have their moments of overpowering. However, while embry had that cuteness/sweetness to her origjnal work, she did not hijack Steele's persona to this extent
I fixed all the dialogue to make it more vague. Other than Anno which is going back to the drawing board. Happy?
Also when did I ever say this would be the first project I submitted. Flahne, Inessa and Gel'Zon will all be submitted before I finish Embry. Yeah it was ambitious for my first ever project. But that's typically the case anyway. You're guilty of that too. Unlike almost all people I was stubborn enough to keep working on it though.
Also I'm not gonna sit on my ass while I wait for Fen to review Flahne. I imagine he will give me feedback and I'll use that to make changes on the other projects.
The dialogue feedback was accurate and welcome, although, the way you said it comes off quite insensitive.
However, I don't feel Embry's is overly cute or out of character in the expansion, especially since it incorporates much of JimT's work. I have half a mind to post his version but that would probably cause problems of its own.
Also when did I ever say this would be the first project I submitted. Flahne, Inessa and Gel'Zon will all be submitted before I finish Embry. Yeah it was ambitious for my first ever project. But that's typically the case anyway. You're guilty of that too. Unlike almost all people I was stubborn enough to keep working on it though.
Also I'm not gonna sit on my ass while I wait for Fen to review Flahne. I imagine he will give me feedback and I'll use that to make changes on the other projects.
The dialogue feedback was accurate and welcome, although, the way you said it comes off quite insensitive.
However, I don't feel Embry's is overly cute or out of character in the expansion, especially since it incorporates much of JimT's work. I have half a mind to post his version but that would probably cause problems of its own.
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Except none of those projects have been accepted/given feedback. Yes, fen takes a while, but HE is the one that approves/dissapproves projects.
For the insensitive part, yeah i'm a bit of an ass and a stickler for certain things, bite me, that's just how i am.
For the last bit, we could go back and forth on it due to differing opinions. Mine has been said, yours has been said, we're likely to not agree on it
I'm still trying to wrap my head around marrying anybody in this game universe, let alone marrying Embry of all people. Like, what the hell is my Steele going to tell Embry: she has close to nine thousand children a third of whom occupy an entire floor of a space station. Also she grows a dick every once in a while to knock up some prisoners in space jail. Also Steele unwittingly banged her half sister and drank choco milk from her tits (in my game at least).
At the very least I'd expect one of those unusual weddings porn stars have every once in a while between Steele, Syri, Anno, Kaede and Erra with Kase as the rings boi and Celise as the flower goo.
I'm going to need to roll up a pure Steele for Embry.
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Just to be semi-contrarian; there should be a route for corrupting Embry.
Great minds think alike. It's too much trouble rolling up a new Steele, let's corrupt Embry!
I'm fickle like that.
https://imgur.com/aAfU8NE
Oh god the work corrupting her. I don't know if I'm even capable of corrupting an NPC. IDK it'd depend what you mean by corruption.
Oh god the work corrupting her. I don't know if I'm even capable of corrupting an NPC. IDK it'd depend what you mean by corruption.
Well, TiTS doesn't have a corruption mechanic like CoC (Taint isn't really the same) so corrupting Embry would just be slutifying - or even bimbofying - her. The closest thing we have in-game already to serve an example (as far as I'm aware, anyway) are Del's interactions.
Just wanted to say: thank you for doing this! Embry is one of my favorite NPC's in all of Trials. The idea that she's getting more content makes me really happy.
Haven't gone through the entire document yet, but so far it looks good. I am really hoping that the pregnancy content makes it in, though.
Haven't gone through the entire document yet, but so far it looks good. I am really hoping that the pregnancy content makes it in, though.
This was a terrible, fucking stupid idea. Oh my god, you get locked out of almost all content except the main quest by saving yourself and then having a monogamous relationship with a single character. Quite possibly the dumbest idea I've ever had when it comes to character creation. Also, when you tell you Embry you want to have a monogamous relationship she tells you it's okay if you sleep with people if it can't be helped.
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As someone who chose monogamy with Fisianna and can't bring myself to sleep with anyone else, what content am I missing besides sex scenes?This was a terrible, fucking stupid idea. Oh my god, you get locked out of almost all content except the main quest by saving yourself and then having a monogamous relationship with a single character. Quite possibly the dumbest idea I've ever had when it comes to character creation. Also, when you tell you Embry you want to have a monogamous relationship she tells you it's okay if you sleep with people if it can't be helped.
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