Typos and Etc

Theron

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Kashima said:
The captain’s mutated form rapidly recovers from damage, knitting closed fresh wounds with newly-sprouted tentacles! (H: +12)
The dialogue box has an empty line at the bottom.
 

XBoxMaster131

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im not sure what this is meant to signify, as it shows up even after recruiting syri. maybe some kind of holdover or whatever, idk. regardless, if left as is, its a fair bit confusing, and makes you think your save is borked somehow

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XBoxMaster131

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change to "a pirate, or a killer... I didn't see anything"

also, missing space after the ellipses 3 paragraphs up

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XBoxMaster131

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thought id slap this here cuz why not

dammit, sorry, lost track of this one.

well, to be honest, after going over it again really the only thing that stands out is that you can just waltz into cherris room right off the bat with no buildup or anything. maybe i just glanced over something but i feel like there mnay have been some kind of oversight from that. sorry if im wasting your time.
 

XBoxMaster131

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maybe remove this, it breaks the flow of the sentnce, and maybe check for other instances of this too

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Bast

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Edan's brosex "catch" variant:
1. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch.
2. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch. <- new sentence
3. It could be just your submissive side speaking, but the thought of being his personal sex toy sounds really, really hot. <- these two words have too much space in between them ingame.
4. Without warning, the stud pushes himself balls-deep into your narrow, moist ass and, with a guttural groan, starts to cum. <- there shouldn't be a comma after the word "and"

5. You can feel the impact of each thrust with blissful clarity, filling you to the core and making a bulge in your belly just before his cum-heavy sack claps against your own massive nuts. Meanwhile, your stallion-bitchbreaker dangles to the rhythm of his movements, dripping wild ropes of thick precum all over Edan’s leather couch.

your boycunt roughly and without interruption for several minutes, using you as a cocksleeve just like he promised. At this rate, however, it’s no surprise that he doesn’t last long. As Edan gets closer and closer to his own selfish climax, his back plates start to glow an increasingly bright yellow, lighting the living room. <- there are seemingly some words missing between these two paragraphs
 
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