Typos and Etc
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My thread gotclosed. Not cool enough I s'pose, so back to leeching off the XBox!
Milk Thief, tail fucking scene, selected to breastfeed. This sentence here: Think it's supposed to be "got to" or "gotta" breed her, properly!
Milk Thief, tail fucking scene, selected to breastfeed. This sentence here: Think it's supposed to be "got to" or "gotta" breed her, properly!
Post combat, tail sex with Ganger. Probably supposed to be "The looks you receive are less flattering:"
"Softb" in Eloise's sex scene for being her girlfriend and topping her. Not sure if relevant I picked goth outfit.
Asking Quaelle about herself. She has an odd speech pattern, so it's hard to work out, but I think this part there's a "be" missing.
Another character with odd vocal patterns, but I think this is supposed to be "thought" rather than "though".
im not sure what this is meant to signify, as it shows up even after recruiting syri. maybe some kind of holdover or whatever, idk. regardless, if left as is, its a fair bit confusing, and makes you think your save is borked somehow
change to "a pirate, or a killer... I didn't see anything"
also, missing space after the ellipses 3 paragraphs up
also, missing space after the ellipses 3 paragraphs up
maybe remove this, it breaks the flow of the sentnce, and maybe check for other instances of this too
Edan's brosex "catch" variant:
1. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch.
2. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch. <- new sentence
3. It could be just your submissive side speaking, but the thought of being his personal sex toy sounds really, really hot. <- these two words have too much space in between them ingame.
4. Without warning, the stud pushes himself balls-deep into your narrow, moist ass and, with a guttural groan, starts to cum. <- there shouldn't be a comma after the word "and"
5. You can feel the impact of each thrust with blissful clarity, filling you to the core and making a bulge in your belly just before his cum-heavy sack claps against your own massive nuts. Meanwhile, your stallion-bitchbreaker dangles to the rhythm of his movements, dripping wild ropes of thick precum all over Edan’s leather couch.
your boycunt roughly and without interruption for several minutes, using you as a cocksleeve just like he promised. At this rate, however, it’s no surprise that he doesn’t last long. As Edan gets closer and closer to his own selfish climax, his back plates start to glow an increasingly bright yellow, lighting the living room. <- there are seemingly some words missing between these two paragraphs
1. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch.
2. Your beast-cock throbs powerfully in your handas it simultaneously starts to unload a literal torrent of thick jism all over Edan’s couch. <- new sentence
3. It could be just your submissive side speaking, but the thought of being his personal sex toy sounds really, really hot. <- these two words have too much space in between them ingame.
4. Without warning, the stud pushes himself balls-deep into your narrow, moist ass and, with a guttural groan, starts to cum. <- there shouldn't be a comma after the word "and"
5. You can feel the impact of each thrust with blissful clarity, filling you to the core and making a bulge in your belly just before his cum-heavy sack claps against your own massive nuts. Meanwhile, your stallion-bitchbreaker dangles to the rhythm of his movements, dripping wild ropes of thick precum all over Edan’s leather couch.
your boycunt roughly and without interruption for several minutes, using you as a cocksleeve just like he promised. At this rate, however, it’s no surprise that he doesn’t last long. As Edan gets closer and closer to his own selfish climax, his back plates start to glow an increasingly bright yellow, lighting the living room. <- there are seemingly some words missing between these two paragraphs
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I return! And Lessau is node-ing his approval. Should be a nod, not a node. Scene is asking Lessau about Hellhounding our favourite dickgirl Syri.
Getting bred by a quaddomme while I have wings. A small tense issue here, where it should be "it finds".
Appearance descriptions across multiple characters seem to be cut off, particularly PC descriptors. Admittedly I got the shark tail in SaveEdit, however even if I use a bare save and ONLY edit the tail it results in
The bolded part is what I'm emphasizing; a cut off sentence. The description should be something along the lines of making you look predatory or improving your ability to swim. Everything else descriptor wise works fine however.
