Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!

[Jarylan]

Took a closer look at the Vanae Huntress on Mhen'ga and found this one. Missing word, probably tail?

Meanwhile her whips around as she ‘dances’, another weapon in the alien girl’s natural arsenal.

Edit: The above error also affects the Vanae maiden, as well as this missing word error. However, I don't know what should go here. Once again, this is using Closer Look.

Her and short skirt, not to mention her tiny breasts, make her look almost girlish

 

[Jarylan]

Strange consistency error here when fighting Dane. I wonder why it only mentions he's blind some of the time?

 

[Jarylan]

Found another interesting one when fighting the Vanae Huntress. It's probably also true of the maiden. Grammar error, should be "prevents any of the lust-inducing liquid from seeping into it."

Suddenly, the busty huntress grabs the sides of her big, milk-filled mammaries. She squeezes them and squirts a stream of milk at you. You are splattered with her violet milk! Fortunately for you, your Atma Armor Mk. I is watertight and prevents any of the lust-inducing liquid to seep into it.

Edit: Confirmed, the error also applies to the maiden.

 

[Jarylan]

Talking to Colenso about work. Should be "rather than", perhaps. Or maybe "as anyone else".

may as well be a U.G.C. shadow operative that helps me do it than anyone else.

 

[Theron]

One of the mutants grabs its stunned companion with its tentacles, roaring into its ear and thrusting into its exposed orifices with every tentacle. The stunned mutant shrieks, roused from its stupor by a sudden rush of pleasure and stimulation. It turns its attention directly towards you, eyes afire with renewed desire.

the infected crew member B is no longer stunned!

Should 'the' be capitalized?
Also, there's an empty line in the block afterward.

Smooth bulkheads are marred by evidence of monstrous debauchery, splattered with the cum of a dozen races, intermingled into an overwhelmingly sexual aroma.

Steele is wearing the Atma Armor, so probably can't actually smell it.

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

bit of an inconsistency here, as it says i got there first, but i she acted like i lost the race.

save file included if this is a glitch and you need to do some testing

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[PanzerGuitar00]

Maybe tweak it to calling it a "curtain door" in the first instance, and from that point forward instead of referring to it as a "curtain" just call it a door. As it is, it feels a bit... im not sure, its like the writer was trying to describe it but didnt know the proper terminology, you know? Not trying to be discrespectful, sorry, thats just the impression i got.

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[PanzerGuitar00]

maybe change 'this" to "that". more grammatically correct, im pretty sure

Strict-9 cocks an eyebrow. “Is this a XO stance? Oh my! We’re gonna have so much fun, you and I!”