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I've gotten through most of the talk sections and should be slowly working my way through the rest over time, but so far this is excellent. I've just pointed out a couple of places where there seem to be inconsistencies (especially with the his/her pronoun variable), suggested removing a couple...

Alright, finally got through the sample scene. I tried to focus just on stuff like tone and style, though I might have instinctually corrected some grammar as well. Overall, I think you have a good base here that just needs more development to really come into its own. Just a couple of general...

Decided to procrastinate some more and skim through this. I'm not even going to touch the Technicolor mess that is the "Usage" section, but I did try to clean up some grammar, rework a couple clunky sentences, and add some other minor suggestions. All-in-all, this seems like a well thought out...

Basically, any of the really common verbs we don't even think about. The most notorious one is "to be," or its forms like "was, is, were," etc. Instead of using easy, common verbs like those constantly, spice up your writing with words that have more action and interest behind them. I.e., the...

Alright, I'm going to put my editor hat on and take a crack at this. Overall, there's nothing particularly egregious here, though I could definitely tell you haven't written much narrative in a good while. A lot of the sentences are structured the same way, which makes them all kind of blend...

Hey there, naïve first time poster here (this is the part where you groan in exasperation). I've been playing TiTS for around a year at this point, and having identified my likes and things I'd like to see in it at some point, I figure now is as good a time as any to attempt a contribution. As...

Hey there, naive first-time poster here. (get your exasperated groans out now, folks) I've been playing TiTS for about a year now, and have gotten comfortable enough with it that I feel ready (at least as ready as I'll ever be) to attempt contributing. Now, I'm trying my hardest to not be under...