Typos and Etc

[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change "the" to "a" and also maybe move or remove that apostrophe

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[XBoxMaster131]

Missing capitaliztion

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[XBoxMaster131]

Seems like theres a issing paragraph here, as theres no space before the "enough"

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[XBoxMaster131]

Maybe change the period to an ellipses

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe add an apostrophe to the "o"

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[XBoxMaster131]

Missing question mark

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[XBoxMaster131]

the boldening here is incomplete

 

[XBoxMaster131]

missing space

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[XBoxMaster131]

This is a bit of an odd sentence. Maybe replace "yes" with "amazing or something along those lines

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[XBoxMaster131]

Uncapitalize, or maybe change the comma before into a colon? IDK, maybe ask doots

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe remove the comma. it kinda breaks the flow of the sentence

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[XBoxMaster131]

Some missing punctuation and spaces in the sentence

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[XBoxMaster131]

Maybe change the leftmost choice option th "newborns" or Infants" or something

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[XBoxMaster131]

Found an few issues with the "No" option when talking to Emese about sex. For startes, it doesnt boot you to the snowy streets like it says.

Secondly, the choice doesnt show up again, even though it probably should

apologies if i explained that last one poorly

 

[XBoxMaster131]

amybe remove the hyphen in the description of the xtr8

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[XBoxMaster131]

typo in the xtr8 description

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[XBoxMaster131]

Why does the plasma katana have a negative bonus hp value? I have no clue what the deal is whith this tbh

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe remove the comma

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe chage he's to he or grows to growing

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change to came or cum

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[XBoxMaster131]

missing period. may be due to parser

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe remove "him to"? as is it sounds kinda weird. sorry if this is too nitpicky

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change to "continuing to drink". again, not terrible, but as is it sounds kinda weird

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[XBoxMaster131]

missing space

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[XBoxMaster131]

random y here

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change to "nuh uh". yes i know im being a nazi about it im sorry

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe uncapitalize she

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[XBoxMaster131]

extra period. or maybe missing one from an ellipses? idk

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[XBoxMaster131]

uncapitalize

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[XBoxMaster131]

maybe remove the comma

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