Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!

[PanzerGuitar00]

maybe replace this comma with an ellipses or something to emphasize her hesitation


She helped us a lot, guided us through the ship without tricking us once, but I’ve got a weird gut feeling about her.”

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

maybe change to the tooltip toext to just "What's gotten into her?"

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[PanzerGuitar00]

change to "take these"

The chromed zaika nods. “Yes. Here, take this. I found them when we searched for a weedkiller,”

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

maybe change gasp to something else. it doesnt really fit very well here.

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[PanzerGuitar00]

This sentence is fairly redundant. not sure how youd rework it though. maybe something like "three times my energy output and the size of a hovercar" or something along those lines

“My sensors don’t pick up any enemy signatures, but there are thousands of heat signatures. No way! One of them is massive! Three times my size and as large as a hovercar!”

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

not sure if the author meant "healsies" here, but figured id point it out to be safe

Zero Plus sighs. “All good then. Can’t give you tail heatsies if you can’t do tail fuckies,” she giggles before resuming her caresses.

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

this is far from the worst instance, but maybe tweak this a bit to give better indication as to who is speaking in order to prevent confusion

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[PanzerGuitar00]

maybe move the exclamation mark to the next sentence and replace it with a comma

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[PanzerGuitar00]

replace "this" with "that"

It’s unfortunate that she took GU-1 with her. This failed excuse for an XO-breaker belonged in the trash!

 

[PanzerGuitar00]

Again, maybe tweak to give better indication as to who is speaking

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[Jacques00]

Mostly fixed for the next release (not the current one, but the next).

typo in the tooltip for the Physical barrier status, change "fly" to "is flying"

This one is fine as-is. The "debris" is plural and the sentence seems to be in present tense.

Oh boy... ok honestly like half this scene needs some adjustment, namely the first half, in which its almost impossible to tell exactly who is speaking.

Not sure who is speaking, so I've asked the author for clarity.

heatsies

This seems to be a specific word she uses for this one instance, as she uses it for multiple variants of the scene.

 

[Theron]

0.9.155-PUBLIC#6883

A flood of thick spunk gushes across the floor of the freighter as you wilfully empty your prostate, groaning in joy.

The sensation sets you back on edge and suddenly you’re cumming with your ERROR: CockDescript Called But No Cock Present again, doubling over and groaning.

This Steele does not have any penises.
In the Mindwash menu, if it matters.

 

[Jacques00]

0.9.155-PUBLIC#6883

This Steele does not have any penises.
In the Mindwash menu, if it matters.

Yes, it seems like the VR variant doesn't actually carry over any transformations (even if the changes are supposed to be an illusion), so this is a more involved issue than a typo. I'll need a save file for testing, if possible.

 

[Theron]

Yes, it seems like the VR variant doesn't actually carry over any transformations (even if the changes are supposed to be an illusion), so this is a more involved issue than a typo. I'll need a save file for testing, if possible.

Very simple new game, cheated in VR program and Mindwash Visor. Issue does occur.

 

[Jacques00]

Very simple new game, cheated in VR program and Mindwash Visor. Issue does occur.

Thanks, hopefully fixed for the next release. When in the VR version of the scene, the transformations should now be applied to a dummy clone of the player and parse the text from that, then everything should revert back after the scene is done.