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Heading to the cockpit, you settle into the captain’s chair and set course for Tavros, planning to get Blue home right away.An hour later
 

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You clearly feel as much as hear her moan in the back of her throat as she goes down on you, the cock-hungry ovir clearly loving sucking down on your mare-member. You notice her hand slip away from your spit-coated cock just as Blue’s blonde head lowers deep into your lap.Slowly, Blue slides you into her waiting mouth and throat. Basking in the feeling of her soft lips, you hear her gag and stop, clearly hitting her limit. You notice the purple woman quiver, relishing in feeling your cock shoved deep into her throat.
 

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perhaps remove the first comma




Your moans turn to gasps, as Blue kisses you, a heat starting to rise deep in your belly. Precum starts to seep from your twitching cockhead, dribbling along Blue’s brightly colored lips.
 

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one missing period in an ellipses and a missing space





“T-there’s also, t-the.. One of my-my...how I’ve got my little sis-No! I can’t tell that. I-I it’s too embarrassing...” Her voice certainly sounds embarrassed, but she’s gotta finish what she starts. A little encouragement and she’s back on track. “Oh, stars! I-I shouldn’t have said... I- well, I was just roaming around the ship, loitering, I was bored and I couldn’t find Emily. She wasn’t in the lab, she wasn’t in the observation deck, I even checked the cargo hold. How can someone need that many hats it’s beyond me. I tell you, there were dozens of crates, all full of hats...”
 

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Missing capitalization, and i think a few words missing as well? idk what happened





“I also remember my first birthday quite fondly. Well, “birthday”, we were celebrating my first year since Emily and her crew found me. There were balloons, party hats, cake, candles, the whole shebang! There was this idiot stroking a balloon against her fur and giving everyone static shocks. When she did it to Emily, I got pissed and yanked the balloon. Bad idea, me and electricity, you know...the balloon went boom, it didn’t pop, it went boom and burst into flames and then... chain reaction! all the balloons bursting like fireworks laughs oh man, you should have seen it, everyone was freaking out. Emily just scampered, bumped into someone, tripped and fell face first into the cake. I think I have a picture of that moment somewhere.”
 

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perhaps put "and" before cynthis? imo, it would help the sentence flow much better. anslo, maybe remove the comma, but im not too sure about that one.



When you’re finished you open your eyes to see Walt looking up, Cynthia looking down at the two of you with a teasing smirk.
 

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maybe swap pre with fountain, or place of in front of pre, either one works






You can hear Anyxine sighing softly, starting to type again, getting back into her workflow as much as she can - though the staccato rhythm she’s keeping is slower and less steady than the lightning speed she’s used to. Her bestial dick throbs for you, grinding against your cheek while you slaver over her balls and knot until they glisten, and her taste is so embedded in your mind that you can’t think of anything but Anyxine. Anyx, and that glorious fountain pre swaying overhead.
 

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Vark moves through the tight cinch, lathering your muscles in saliva., and what feels like half a foot of hot, flexible muscle settles in its new bed. He presses it against your prostate in the process of his exploration, and chuckles when you cry out. His tongue returns to the spot to abuse it until your mare-member is jumping and dripping all over the floor, lurid moans escaping your lips.
 

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Once you’ve hollowed him out, moulded him and stretched him to your needs,, you begin to beat a mild tempo against his meaty backside.
 

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When you finally finish cumming together, he gently lays down onto his bedding, allowing you to lay atop him with your dick still inside. You carefully extract yourself, your knot popping free, and give his butt a loving caress. “Love you, Vark.” He looks back at you with a crimson blush and nods. “L-Love you too..”
 

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“It’s exhausting, Ms Steele,” she responds, looking up from her holopad with a sigh and a smile. “Getting fucked half the day, then editing all of it down into good content - it’s tough!But I wouldn’t change it for anything in the world.”
 

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Not sure what happened here. Maybe some slang im not familiar with?





Riya has not cum herself; she’s already tucking her livid ramrod of an erection back into her briefs, frustration radiating off of her.

“I’m saving that T to beat your ass with next time,” she growls at you. “Hope you enjoyed that, genuinely. It’s not happening again.”
 

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few weird typo and and extra comma in this one. a rare 2x combo!



Your hips, yoked to the pheromones driving your body, pound away. Curtains of femcum splash up over your tight middle. Other patrons look on in awe. More than one is masturbating, nearly as beholden to Sylvie’s sorcerous scent as you. Some are fucking, adding their own sexual aromas to the fuck-melange filling the air. Your sodden nose twitches. So do your [pc.cocks. You’re glad it’s impossible to focus on anything than breeding this law-serving slut or you’d be self-conscious about the audience., knowing that everyone around you either wants to be you or to fuck you.
 

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With a wet pop,, the red ball finally pushes out of Syri’s butt, drooping down against her balls in a lube-covered mess.
 

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perhaps change to "as the door closes". apologies if that is rude of me to suggest



you’re greeted with the ever-alluring view of the twins sprawled out on your bed, dolled up in their colorful lingerie, already getting their hands all over each others’ breasts. Their lips meet as the door’s closing behind you, tails wagging energetically.
 

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some odd grammar here




Neither sister appears especially cogent, but they don’t need to be to be rut or fuck, or grind dicks together with happy, adoring looks writ large on their faces. Kally’s dark fur is soon matted and musky with Kiro’s drippings.
 

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This one is a double feature. extra quotation marks in the highlighted bit, and an italics bug




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missing space after comma


He gives you a loving smile, stroking your cheek with his padded thumb, and simply asks,“Want treat?”
 

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Dreghan’s head leans back ever so slightly while you bury yourself into his crotch, resting a hand upon your head, rewarding you with a slow and gentle rub, as if he were petting a good bitch. Which, of course, you are.His furred fingers slowly comb through your black braid adoringly as you prepare for what comes next. He makes sure to gently caress your pointed ears, scritching them lovingly in that sensitive spot right where they meet your head.
 

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“Of course we don’t, silly! If they stay here for too long they know I’ll steal their ideas, but who else are they going to show off to? None of us stay here all the time, except maybe me I suppose...,” she explains cheerily.
 

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He shrugs, “Doc herself wasn’t a hundred percent sure, and I never got around to knocking up a non-leithan. Not that I know of, anyway. It’s not everyday you find a bitch in heat that hasn’t been bred already, especially around these parts,” he adds, eyeing the raskvel crowd. “Besides, I’m not in a good position to support kids, being a merc and all. Sometimes I wonder why I even got this treatment; cost me a pretty penny too.”

Now it’s your turn to laugh, and you proceed to tell Edan about the huge nursery your Dad built for you. He wouldn’t have to worry about a thing after providing the seed.”

“Damn, Steele, you’re always full of surprises!” he says, taking a moment to digest the information. “Well, if you’re so eager to be a mother, I guess I can be your breeding stud,” he says with a cocksure grin.
 

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misspelling of mooseling





Scene By: Skom
Her tauric half is slightly swollen, the sides flaring quite nicely. And you know it’s because of your seed. The police-woman is carrying three adorable mosselings, so her belly is bound to expand even more as the pregnancy progresses. The thought makes your chest swell with fatherly pride.
 

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missing period in the last sentence




You get close to Sylvie and tell her what’s on your mind. The police-woman places a hand on her chin. “Hmm, alright, sounds reasonable. But that doesn’t mean you’re excused from rutting me, Ms Steele,” she says with a sultry smirk , catching a lock of your black braid and twirling it on her finger
 

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Scene By: Preacher
Trying to understand the scale of this room would make most people confused. Looking at it from a window elsewhere on the station makes it look like a large, domed warehouse, but when inside it is like a vast expanse of a desert environment. There is even an artificial sun on the roof. The interior must be lined with numerous screens to simulate a distant environment. There does seem to be about a circular kilometer of actual space, plenty for your surrogate children. By the looks of it there are currently 15 worms digging about and 11 hybrids walking around. Perhaps due to a sense of smell or thermal signature,they know you were their carrier and don’t attack you. They don’t attack the droids either. They must either be used to their presence, or not see them as a threat. There also seems to be a small circular structure close to the door. The sign says worm feed. That’s understandable, since any worms that might come here can’t really go to the mess hall to get their food. What will you do now that you’re here?
 

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Scene By: Preacher
You move towards a droid that is sweeping some sand from the main platform, and tap on its metallic shoulder to get its attention. Diverting its head towards you, her sensors recognize you and stop what she was currently doing to tend to your requests. “Is there anything you’d like help with Miss Steele?” they ask as they fold their hands in front of their dress, awaiting your input. Upon telling them you just want some information, they turn into some kind of tour guide, telling you the functions and purposes of various things until finally you reach the end of the tour. “As you can see, this sectioned-off room is where we keep all the nutritional packages to feed the biological units that cannot make it to the mess hall. That concludes the requirements of current query request. For more info, please post queries to another nurse unit.”. She resumes her previous task with no delay. They must be busy. You guess you need to get the attention of a different one if you want to know more.
 

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typo in the description of the pump kings armor. should read "A suit of pitch-black platemail"



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I think this was meant to be "bulb", but im not sure tbh.... whichever yall think is best.



Even before she’s finished pumping out her latest load, the blub of one of her tail tips finds its way to your spongy bum. Spilling her own lubricant across your nethers, the fat peak pushes up against your warm sphincter.
 

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maybe change sweat to sweet or sweaty



Your tongue slides along the smooth, leathery texture of Kelly’s sweat, leg-thick dicks, collecting rivulets of sugary semen, losing your train of thought.
 
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