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XBoxMaster131

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I think theres supposed to be something like "nestling his lips snugly against" here. Sorry if im being rude putting this in here, it just seemed odd to me



Wet warmth surrounds your sensitive milk tap as the snuggling vulpine settles in, nestling his snugly up against your milk-packed udders.
 

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Miscapitalization here





The scheming fox’s smiling lips happily play along your Fluffy, white fur, still kissing back and forth between your thick thighs as you squirm in the vulpine’s squeezing limbs. The thought of being made so defenseless causes your child-bearing hips to fuss on their own, squirming in the fox’s grip as you struggle for control.
 

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Missing capitalization





“Well, look at you! What a perky, pretty young thing’s come to visit me this time! Aren’t I lucky!” she says with a big smile, touching your shoulder. Her emerald eyes go vacant for a moment. You hear a faint buzz. a kitsune. How exciting! I haven’t looked after one of those in a long time.”
 

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Missing paragraph spacing in between the discriptors for lotus eater and mitchs meditations. sorry if im describing this poorly


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“Very,” she replies, antennae bobbing as she brings them to mind. “They will grow up in a trembluous environment, perhaps, but they will have each other if it ever seems too strange. I am content, when I think of them. three is an excellent number to have.”
 

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Can anybody join in?
Zheng Shi Slave Quarters said:
“Slave thoughts.” The tarratch’s calm, creaking voice is like a locust’s wings. “Purest rue collars, a fine delicacy. Yes, let us break bread together.”

She shoves your face right down her prestigious prick, stretching your black lips wide and making tears start from your eyes as she cumsERROR: COULD NOT FIND ATTRIBUTE "hasSnakebyte" FOR OBJ "pc", pouring piping hot gryvain cum down your bulging throat.[]
Zheng Shi Lounge said:
You can’t take your eyes off it. You want to get into that tangle of lissom legs and bouncing breasts so damn bad... the tactile feedback in your crotch makes you orgasm like a firework,
and you wail as you ride it, reactively thrusting into the bumpy wet dream you’re screwing.
 

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typo here.

also, if i may, and apologies if this is rude to suggest, maybe change some of it to the puazi child from earlier", as it would help make the link to the previous scene stronger and more fluid. just my opinin though, do with it what you may.


And then it zooms all the way back in again in the space of three seconds, centring in on the starstruck face of a puazi child in the auditorium
 

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missing space





The carnal admiration is mutual; you can feel his wide green eyes ogling your naked breasts.His hands slide up your hips and trail up your sides. An electric shiver shoots up your spine:
 

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missing space



She lets out a quiet gasp and shivers as you wrap your arm around her lower back and begin to guide her towards your room, the softness of her breast pressing against your side.“Any snakelike abilities I should know about?” you ask, smiling at her.
 

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missing space


Also, maybe unbolden the "you're"




The younger gryvain tech looks between you and the milfy doctor, cheeks paling. “W-wait, you’re thatCaptain Steele?” she groans, “Oh for goddess’s sake...”
 

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perhaps completely bold "I'm". the apostophe and m arent for some reason




Sela rolls her eyes. I’m your baby. That’s a ship. And you can make another giant crotch rocket of a ship; I can’t make a new mom.”
 

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missing period




“Mmm, yes, darling, just like that,” she coos, stroking your cheek. “Stick it in and let mommy breed you good”
 

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extra space, or perhaps there was meant to be something like "say" afterwards? IDK.




“Don’t you dare go soft on me,” you , pulling the doctor’s chain taut. “I’m not done with you yet.”
 

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maybe change can to cant




You can help yourself. Eyes fixed firmly on her tits, you bask in their light. The titanic twin orbs extend well over two feet out from the rest of her, expanding out so wide you can’t properly see her shoulders. Due to her height, you can’t even begin to guess her cup size. Even so, they still look massive on her big frame.
 

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missing space



“Lucky...” Gol turns away, once again disinterested.A few sets of eyes around the table glance around, silence setting in.
 

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Missing period in ellipses



“Ahh, yes..” Scully nods, “Grandchildren! We’ve already quite a few, but...” he shifts his gaze past you, towards Ari. “We’re always looking for more.”
 

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Random bracket. maybe leftover from coding? idk



Swallowing hard, Ari seems to shrink down into her chair, as if trying to slip down into the cracks of the floor.}
 

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missing space after ellipses




Pink snorts. “Smartass.” She shifts her gaze down to her codex, muting the music. “Alright then... Well, I never planned on having kids. Not because I didn’t like them or some shit, I just... never thought about it. And since my childhood was so...fucked, I had literally no idea how a parent was even supposed to act. So...” she trails off, her eyelids looking like they weigh a thousand pounds. “I fucked it up.”
 

XBoxMaster131

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maybe add "a" before "younger"

Also, fr0sty, if youre seeing this, what the fuck were you smoking when you wrote all this dude?



“And whose idea was it to take a break? HIS! He wanted to fuck real twenty-year-olds and not just someone who looked like one! So yeah! I fucked around a little, and SURE, MAAAAAYBE getting knocked up by younger and hotter guy wasn’t the best idea in the world.”
 

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whats the word for something that has been capitalized when it shouldnt be? well whatever it is, thats here




“Whoooa.” The blonde ovir moves in closer, sticking her face so close to the pale woman you feel your butthole clench in concern. “You’re, like, super pretty... Boss, Isn’t she super pretty?”
 
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