Several blurbs appear during the first ever training scene with Zo, alluding to the Champ having trained with her before. If they are indeed displayed out of order because the game somehow counts the first time training that skill as the second one, it might explain why the player gets the Equanimity power after only two sessions, compared to the three other lessons take.
Additionally, I found a sentence that seems disjointed:
Edit: two potential typos in the last training session for Equanimity:
She hands you the scabbard with her left hand, and turns the sword into a reverse grip in her right. You made some decent progress with her last lesson, and you even managed to complete a single twirl with the scabbard, but she isn’t quite ready to trust you with the sword yet. Not that you blame her.
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It’s hardly an easy swords-dancing routine to perform, but you nonetheless have a much easier time with it than the routine you had done before. You attribute that to a better understanding of what it is that Zo has been trying to teach you: it may seem like silly sword tricks that have no bearing or purpose in combat – and, well, it is and they don’t, but what she’s teaching you is to better understand how to move and coordinate yourself with a sword in your hand. The blade is as much an extension of yourself as it is a weapon or a tool, and the better, more dexterously, and more fluidly you can move with it in practice, the better you can wield it in combat.
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Like before, Zo steps into your space, her hands first grabbing onto your elbows before trailing down your forearms and ending at your own hands. She could take the scabbard from them... but, instead, she simply stands there and holds your hands for a moment. Her deep, emerald-green eyes stay locked onto yours as they turn into crescents underneath her proud, glowing smile. Her hands are very warm and soft against your own.
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It’s hardly an easy swords-dancing routine to perform, but you nonetheless have a much easier time with it than the routine you had done before. You attribute that to a better understanding of what it is that Zo has been trying to teach you: it may seem like silly sword tricks that have no bearing or purpose in combat – and, well, it is and they don’t, but what she’s teaching you is to better understand how to move and coordinate yourself with a sword in your hand. The blade is as much an extension of yourself as it is a weapon or a tool, and the better, more dexterously, and more fluidly you can move with it in practice, the better you can wield it in combat.
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Like before, Zo steps into your space, her hands first grabbing onto your elbows before trailing down your forearms and ending at your own hands. She could take the scabbard from them... but, instead, she simply stands there and holds your hands for a moment. Her deep, emerald-green eyes stay locked onto yours as they turn into crescents underneath her proud, glowing smile. Her hands are very warm and soft against your own.
Additionally, I found a sentence that seems disjointed:
Starting with the highlighted portion, the end of the sentence would work better if it was made into a separate one. IMO.Fluidly, she lifts her arm upward, starting at her wrist, then her elbow, to continue the sword on its forward-rolling motion, until the tip of the blade lifts off her sleeve, tracing along the fabric of her suit, it traces along her fingers, where she catches it again, pinched once more between her thumb and index finger.
Edit: two potential typos in the last training session for Equanimity:
'short walk'?It’s a short – only about two dozen steps – from the little field in her grove to her shack, but you walk with her, hand-in-hand, the whole way, and when you get to its door, she struggles with herself to let go.
an extra 'in'You look down at your hands. The sword sits in your left hand, in in reverse grip.
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