[Vision Quest Expansion] [Kiyoko] To Love's End

[419windy]

“Here where one's beliefs and memories are made uncomfortably real, it would be nice to have this mess work in your favor for once”

— Poignant reflection in the Vision Quest plotline

“‘Screw that. I create my own fate.’

You do have that power. With it comes the knowledge that you are responsible for your failures. In due time, you may even glimpse into their true extent.

— Player retorts to Feathered Fiend, Vision Quest plotline




A remnant of a memory against a remnant of a memory, except that she carries your essence. I wonder, was this fate?

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The Mind Expands With the Truth - Vision Quest Expansion

Vision Quest Expansion Existing dialogue: “Here where one's beliefs and memories are made uncomfortably real, it would be nice to have this mess work in your favor for once” — Poignant reflection in the Vision Quest plotline “‘Screw that. I create my own fate.’ You do have that power. With...

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I wrote a few posts about this earlier, how this scene nearly drove me to tears. But I think there's an interaction that could happen if you had the orb with you. I'm new to the syntax, so I need someone to help me out.

 

[Ace Hangman]

It seems like a lot of work to be based on the Champ having the orb and having given her enough essence to manifest but not have freed Kiyoko. Even so, I noted some parsers where I could (even if this is a long shot, maybe it will help with other writings.) The trade-off here is that adding in more things might risk stepping on or muddling the scene as written where it might not have the same impact or focus that it had to inspire you or evoke the emotions. Ultimately only The Observer might be able to allow it if it suits his vision. I don't see this as being a very likely addition (but I am just some guy, what I say means about zero), but thank you for sharing your vision on what The Observer's scene inspired.

Other than that, It probably shouldn't be all italicized or large portions bolded. Dialogue (between quotations) will be automatically italicized, but you can use <i>(words)</i> or <b>(words)</b> to format specific words or lines.

And it should be written in present tense, 'she looks' or 'she's looking' rather than 'she looked' for instance.
And keep writing!