typos and etc

[XBoxMaster131]

missing period




also, maybe replace this comma with a colon or semicolon

 

[Gedan]

noticed that for some reason, the hyper pumped asshole description only shows up if you have both the pumped AND hyper pumped flags. idk if this is intended or not but figured i may as well say something to be safe

Anal plumpness is a sliding scale that pulls in 3 different values with modifiers, Pumped, Hyper and Pumped+Hyper produces three different results.

maybe capitalize from

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Grammatically, this is correct as it is.

i also noticed some possible clashing with the parser tags, namely smooth and fluffy. im pretty sure that here the fluffy tag is meant to override the smooth tag to give it the inteded description, but its not doing that. may want to check other tfs for similar clashes.

unless it was the intention for the flavor rext, like its meant to be smooth fluffy fur or whatever. idk, i thought id bring this up since it stuck out to me

Where, specifically is this happening? The appearance screen is an absolutely titanic clusterfuck of code pulling from like 5 places at once, simultaneously, it's extremely difficult to track down things without being extremely specific.

rat raiders have the naked bust in their fight

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We don't have appropriate source-art to make non-nude busts for each of them individually.

I noticed that when you pirce your nipples with a piercing that has the a singular descriptor, it implies that only one nipple has been pierced, which doesnt make sense. using peircings with plural descriptors doesnt work either, because the wording implies you have all three piercings in your booba, which again, doesnt make sense. the exception to the latter being the hoop set because it comes in a pair instead of triplicate, but even then the wording is a bit awkward.

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See earlier words about the appearance screen. I agree the wording is weird, but the problem is this paragraph where the issue is sources its text from at least 5 completely different places. Accurately figuring out when and when not to include that "each" there because of the specific piercing presence would be a complete pain in the ass.

are you meant to get the lifetoot pollen buff even if you resist it? cuzz for some reason, even after i resist i get it regardless

using dicksprout and choosing to only lengthen also increases your thickness regardless, tho idk if thats due to the normal penis size calulation stuff or not

Things like these should be in a seperate bug report post, and not mixed into general typo fixes.

dont know why its not "long" and "thick" here

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Diameter and circumference-alike phrasing seems completely appropriate when talking about ball size?

 

[XBoxMaster131]

Where, specifically is this happening? The appearance screen is an absolutely titanic clusterfuck of code pulling from like 5 places at once, simultaneously, it's extremely difficult to track down things without being extremely specific.

I'm pretty embarrassed to admit this but I don't actually remember the specifics from when I wrote this... sorry.

I'll workshop jogging my memory tomorrow, and if it comes back to me ill let you know.

Things like these should be in a seperate bug report post, and not mixed into general typo fixes.

Gotcha. Figured I'd save a bit of space, but I'll make sure to do that moving forward.

Diameter and circumference-alike phrasing seems completely appropriate when talking about ball size?

Sorry I was being a retard. I thought it was describing penis dimensions. My bad.

Grammatically, this is correct as it is.

takes second look
Yeah, you're right, it is, though if you don't mind me suggesting maybe remove the "you admit" bit, or at least move it so it isnt in the middle of things, because as it it really messes up the flow of the sentence.

Maybe put a colon sorry semicolon in its place and move it to after "pirate".

 

[XBoxMaster131]

If you dont mind me tooting my own horn a bit, honestly, if it weren't for the fact that I like to play these games for fun, I'd probably volunteer my autism to be some kind of editor or proofreader. Id do it for free too, so long as I get my name in the credits, lol.

After all, what better way to idiot proof something than to have an idiot review it, lol!

 

[Theron]

a bit old fashioned, but still effective.

Should be capitalized.

Flurry Bonus

Maybe change to 'Bonus Hit Rate' to match the flag as presented to the player on other weapons.

 

[XBoxMaster131]

maybe remove the comma

 

[XBoxMaster131]

as you can see at the start and end of the highlighted bit, maybe put a space in front of the hyphens to better eccentuate the pause

 

[XBoxMaster131]

again, maybe remove the comma

 

[XBoxMaster131]

missing period in ellipses

 

[XBoxMaster131]

for some reason, in the Lithium Flower fight, the XOs have the same title and description as the ones from the fight with feruze on the taxi

 

[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change to "pins"

 

[XBoxMaster131]

typo with "that", maybe change to "wishing for good luck, and also change to just "crewmate" as its really only a victory for Paulette

Spoiler

 

[XBoxMaster131]

maybe change to "liberty of jamming your communications and sending your"

 

[XBoxMaster131]

typo

 

[Bast]

Shalin hunter, spacing issue at the end of the sentence:

For several moments arcing through the air, leaving a ribbon of cream behind you, you exist as an entity unlike anything else in the entire galaxy. Beautiful, in your own way .

 

[XBoxMaster131]

change to "to"

 

[XBoxMaster131]

change to "in the direction of the"

 

[XBoxMaster131]

i may have just missed it but i dont recall any prior mention of a strap on in this encounter.

 

[XBoxMaster131]

italics glitch