Iirc that's more of a command console than something you'd perform mind wipes on.
Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!
- Thread starter PanzerGuitar00
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Could be. I mean, it's the only thing resembling a chair ever mentioned, but i guess you're right
change "this" to "that", and change to "It all finally clicks into place!"
Zero Plus chortles. “Not quite. I had to make some... accommodations to stay under the radar. I didn’t expect the memory forging to work, if I’m honest. Not even this cute psionic furball could see through my clever disguise. After all, nobody expects the bubbly bimbo!” she says, fitting her glasses over her eyes. She smiles wryly and raises her ears high. It finally clicks in! Her face — it’s plastered all over the tables and walls!
Zero Plus chortles. “Not quite. I had to make some... accommodations to stay under the radar. I didn’t expect the memory forging to work, if I’m honest. Not even this cute psionic furball could see through my clever disguise. After all, nobody expects the bubbly bimbo!” she says, fitting her glasses over her eyes. She smiles wryly and raises her ears high. It finally clicks in! Her face — it’s plastered all over the tables and walls!
change cell to cells
The purple cyborg frowns. “I grasped some words: geddanium, remote, danger, chamber, and GU. She might be trying to free a GU locked in the cell below.”
The purple cyborg frowns. “I grasped some words: geddanium, remote, danger, chamber, and GU. She might be trying to free a GU locked in the cell below.”
maybe change "rays" to "dots" or "reticules" or something like that
The former XO extends her arm cannon, aiming ominous laser rays at the busty nurse’s chest. “Put the remote down and back off! This isn’t a game!”
The former XO extends her arm cannon, aiming ominous laser rays at the busty nurse’s chest. “Put the remote down and back off! This isn’t a game!”
maybe remove this comma
In the blink of an eye, a capsule of reinforced, red glass and steel falls from the ceiling, trapping your crewmate inside!
In the blink of an eye, a capsule of reinforced, red glass and steel falls from the ceiling, trapping your crewmate inside!
maybe replace "in" with "with"
She barely has the time to gasp before a wall-mounted claw clenches on the translucent walls and places her into a torpedo-like tube. Paulette disappears a second later in a hiss of pneumatic pistons!
She barely has the time to gasp before a wall-mounted claw clenches on the translucent walls and places her into a torpedo-like tube. Paulette disappears a second later in a hiss of pneumatic pistons!
maybe replace nuts with bolts
The gate opens behind her while the huge containment cell rises from the ground. The sealing nuts explode, releasing pressurized gas and greenish liquid all over the place!
The gate opens behind her while the huge containment cell rises from the ground. The sealing nuts explode, releasing pressurized gas and greenish liquid all over the place!
maybe replace jabbing with pumping
Hidden injectors hiss, jabbing the BRAT with experimental stimulants! The titanic beast groans as a synthetic vigor spreads through her sore muscles and clicking pistons!
Hidden injectors hiss, jabbing the BRAT with experimental stimulants! The titanic beast groans as a synthetic vigor spreads through her sore muscles and clicking pistons!
typo, change to limbs
The powerful limps wrap around your arms and legs, tangling you in supple muscles, sweet, white splooge oozing from the flared tips
The powerful limps wrap around your arms and legs, tangling you in supple muscles, sweet, white splooge oozing from the flared tips
no idea why only onde hyphen is big. how do you even type them with a keyboard? serious question. also, maybe italicize "must"
ou service her with all you’ve got, teasing, throbbing, smooching, and milking her sensitive bulbs like a beast in heat, not leaving her but a second of respite. She needs — no! - she must cum like no hydra has ever cum before.
ou service her with all you’ve got, teasing, throbbing, smooching, and milking her sensitive bulbs like a beast in heat, not leaving her but a second of respite. She needs — no! - she must cum like no hydra has ever cum before.
Maybe instead of replacing this, just add "and pumping her" in between "BRAT" and "with"