This occurs when talking to Lumia about helping out with Maternity Duty - this part shouldn't be italicized.
Lumia says this of Champ getting knocked up by Hjorr, but Hjorr knocked up my non-valk Champ without an issue.
Talking to Hjorr:
She's a northern mino, not a southern one, right?
This should probably have a question mark.
If "Lady Light" is a title, then "Light" should also have proper capitalization.
Choosing Sex:
Missing opening quotations and italicization. Also, there should be an apostrophe in "valkyrie's."
Choosing "Get Bred:"
Might benefit from commas.
Despite the text saying Hjorr spun the Champ around at some point, the scene begins with Champ face-to-face with Hjorr (or rather, face-to-tits) and ends with them face-to-face (or tits), which seems contradictory.