Hethia mating press typo

[Dex Caster]

", your combined efforts and weights produce tremors that..."


two prepositions next to each other ruins the flow of this sentence.
"Filling up the poor girl like that and holding her so close to you in a compromising position intended for maximum insemination — really, are you trying to get her pregnant?"
(omitted the "with in this kind" for flow)

 

[zagzig]

First one seems fine - your weight and her weight are figuratively providing the efforts that are producing tremors. Second one has been touched up, cheers.

 

[teawolf]

Hey Zag, sorry to pop in--there's a repeated "your" in "your her and your weight" that should be cleaned up in the first one. Couple of ways could do it, including suggestion above or "...of your weights", which I think is clearest. Possibly "of her and your weights," could also work!

 

[zagzig]

I saw that I was just testing you. I will answer no further questions on the topic.

Should now be sorted, cheers.

 

[teawolf]

I never doubted.