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- Thread starter Merlik
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There is a lot to be desired when it comes to the writing. The grammar alone needs a lot of work.
When you're posting on a forum based around a set of text games with very high standards of English, grammar and spelling are things that people are very likely to be critical of.
Allow me to play doubles advocate here for a moment. For all intensive purposes I think you are wrong. In an age where false morals are a diamond dozen, true virtues are a blessing in the skies, and are more than just ice king on the cake. We often put our false morality on a petal stool like a bunch of pre-Madonnas, but you all seem to be taking something very valuable for granite. So I ask of you to mustard up all the strength you can because it is a doggy dog world out there. Although there is some merit to what you are saying it seems like you have a huge ship on your shoulder. In your argument you seem to throw everything in but the kids Nsync, and even though you are having a feel day with this I am here to bring you back into reality. I have a sick sense when it comes to these types of things. It is almost spooky, because I cannot turn a blonde eye to these glaring flaws in your rhetoric. I have zero taller ants when it comes to people spouting out hate in the name of moral righteousness. You just need to remember what comes around is all around, and when supply and command fails you will be the first to go.
Make my words, when you get down to the brass stacks it doesn't take rocket appliances to get two birds stoned at once. It's clear who makes the pants in this relationship, and sometimes you just have to swallow your prize and accept the facts, instead of making a half-harded effort. You might have to come to this conclusion through denial and error but I swear on my mother's mating name that when you put the petal to the medal you will pass with flying carpets like it's a pizza cake.
Make my words, when you get down to the brass stacks it doesn't take rocket appliances to get two birds stoned at once. It's clear who makes the pants in this relationship, and sometimes you just have to swallow your prize and accept the facts, instead of making a half-harded effort. You might have to come to this conclusion through denial and error but I swear on my mother's mating name that when you put the petal to the medal you will pass with flying carpets like it's a pizza cake.
Nicely said. That made me laugh quite a bit.
As for the OP, as mentioned, with the grammatical issues in the Patreon page alone, you'll struggle to get people playing the game in the first place.
Just going through and cleaning up grammatical errors should help. If you struggle on your own then get someone to proofread it for you if possible (I know if I get someone to go over early drafts of stuff I've written there are usually lots of mistakes)
If you can't even get the little things right, how do you expect to do the big things? If you can't even write using proper grammar and spelling (in a product you're trying to get MONEY for) why should we expect you to be able to write well at all? Good authors know spelling and grammar. Basically, if you struggle with high school-level English, why would we want to read what you write?
More importantly, it betrays an attitude of "who cares?" and "eh, it's good enough". If you can't even be bothered running your text through a spellchecker, then god only knows what kinds of BUGS are going to slip through in the gameplay! First impressions are important.
OK, that was hilarious.
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