A Blonde Tsudere trap boy?

[Dragonspiderkitsune]

Hey guys, so you know what TITS need more of? Beautiful hermaphrodite furries? Well yes, we can never have enough of those. But we also don't have enough pretty boys.

Summary

So here's my idea, I'm planning to write about this kid (Maybe I'll name him Price? Yeah that sounds good so Price) who is like the son of some rich guy. Price is a typical arrogant spoiled pain in the ass. So after his old man get the word of Victor Steele sending the player on a quest at the frontiers for his inheritance, the old man thought it's a rather good idea and ship Price to the frontier and forbid him to come back to the core worlds unless...I don't know, some arbitrary goal is reached.

So as you can imagine the kid is pissed as fuck and in need of someone or something to rage on. Since he can't punch his old man in the face, he holds you (the player) personally responsible for his predicament. This would lead to the first confrontation between Steele and him.

I want him to be also somewhat capable in fighting, so maybe he has like military-grade gene modification before birth which gives him super strength and stuff, but also prevented him from ever using TFs to gain height or make himself look more manly.


Appearance:
As I said I wanted him to be a pretty boy, so he's gonna be thin, likely short, have some muscle but not too much, like a ballet dancer or figure skater. Like something along the lines of Yuri (the Russian one) from "Yuri on Ice!!!"
http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/thumbnails/max550x550/cms/news/104794/yuri-plisetsky.jpeg

But just to drive home the rich spoiled arrogance part, I'm thinking maybe his hair is like really long and curly with drill like ringlets and stuff.
http://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/021_451.jpg
http://pm1.narvii.com/5661/be320a9e912bae9cf4f844786858a8193af7b23b_hq.jpg


Events
In terms of interactions with Steel I'm still thinking about it. The first encounter with Price is probably gonna be him recognizing Steele on Tarvos station and began to rage on you, but didn't go too far because the security of the station intervened. I'm a bit torn as to whether there should be actual combat encounters with him or not, cause it's the first time I've ever attempt to write something for TITS and I fear combat is a bit more than I can chew. So maybe you'll meet him on various bars across the systems. You'll gain his trust by engaging in conversation with him and providing him with useful information regarding the planets you find him on. Of course at the beginning he's gonna be all like F off it's all your fault that I'm in this shit hole in the first place. But if the advises were genuine then the next time you'll find him in a good shape and with slightly better attitude, and vice versa. Eventually you'll find him either becoming a successful planet rusher and thank you for your help(in typical Tsundere fashion of course), or in a total mess which at this point you can either take advantage of him or call his dad to pick him up. In the later cases you'll never see him again.

In the former however that's where the fun shall really begin, now that he trust, or even perhaps even like you a bit, you can convince him to have some fun, eventually even convince him to put on a costume or two for your entertainment, like: "Ba....Baka! It's not like I enjoy dressing up like a maid or something, It's cause you look so pathetic when you pleaded at me so...Wha...What's with that grin on your face!?............Pervert!......"

The possibilities are endless or course.



Please share your thoughts on what do you think of the kid, and is there any suggestions regarding the events or, just anything?

 

[Kesil]

There's already a blonde pretty boy who happens to be the son of some rich guy in the game. His name is Jack.

I do hope he's not a tsundere, though. This is not a damn Japanese visual novel, what with the stereotypical lines and whatnot.

 

[FrankenApple]

While he doesn't seem to be a tsundere (thank god he isn't one of those horrible things), we do have Godi.

 

[NotYouNorI]

There's already a blonde pretty boy who happens to be the son of some rich guy in the game. His name is Jack.

I do hope he's not a tsundere, though. This is not a damn Japanese visual novel, what with the stereotypical lines and whatnot.

Jack/Jill is totes going to be tsundere just without the "baka" or being stereotypical or being type 2.

 

[Dragonspiderkitsune]

There's already a blonde pretty boy who happens to be the son of some rich guy in the game. His name is Jack.

I do hope he's not a tsundere, though. This is not a damn Japanese visual novel, what with the stereotypical lines and whatnot.

Yeah I do agree that the similarity to Jack /Jill is rather large, but since we're still no where near the point we can mingle with our good cousin, plus the fact that Jack can be Jill so I want to make sure that there's a blond cute boy around who Steele can dress up and play with.

And I did exaggerated Price's Tsundereness in his dialogues above just to make his personality a bit more apparent. I mean I haven't even start the scenes yet so the real end product ( if it ever see the light of day)would certainly be very different.

While he doesn't seem to be a tsundere (thank god he isn't one of those horrible things), we do have Godi.

Oh yes Godi. That bust gives me such boners whenever I look at it. To bad there's only so little we can do with him. That's probably why I wanted to do Price to get more pretty boy action.

 

[coldmonkey]

Aren't you basically describing pre-slut Delilah? I mean, he might not be stereotypically tsundere but he's all "I-I don't want to deepthroat your huge dong b-baka", plus a blonde trap boy.

 

[Arhon]

Love the idea, we cant have enough trap-boys but... lets not make him a total tsundere, maybe at some parts he becomes tsundere for a while then back to normal.

 

[balitz Method]

You just want to write Yurio into the game.

Not that I can blame you; the kid's ridiculously cute.

but if this is more than just an "I'm an ideas guy" sort of thing (or at least if you feel you're going to give it the old college try if nothing else) then work on that backstory. There's nothing wrong with him being a tsundere despite people's mixed feelings on them but if you're starting with "he's Jack/Jill but" then you really need to make them stand out more - not that any -real- amount of content is actually being written up for them, but it might happen at some point and you don't want your character to feel like a knock-off.

 

[Nik_van_Rijn]

here's nothing wrong with him being a tsundere despite people's mixed feelings on them but if you're starting with "he's Jack/Jill but" then you really need to make them stand out more - not that any -real- amount of content is actually being written up for them, but it might happen at some point and you don't want your character to feel like a knock-off.

Any ideas on how to work around the fact that the potentially bigger thing is most likely going to be developed after the smaller project and without taking the latter into consideration? Chances of tjem accidentally retracing one another's steps in character development aren't insignificant.

 

[balitz Method]

Best to keep the general idea (that Steele Jr. has been inadvertently ruining his life) but change the backstory for it. Just as a "for example" he could have first run into Steele at their former job, also thinking that it would be good experience for rushing, but got passed over in favor of Steele due to nepotism. Something like that can either be played seriously or for laughs and lead into more moments where Steele ends up hogging the glory on each planet which would provide opportunities to do things like tease him/taunt him about it for tsun scenes, opportunities to try and make it up to him or some such thing for dere, or even a "who're you again?" sort of option that causes him to declare a vendetta.

And just to differentiate them personality-wise you might consider leaning away from the ojou angle since Jack/Jill really only have that going for them in terms of defining traits.