[0.7.6] Wayfort typos

Ace Hangman

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Meeting Farrah after the Renovations are completed (Coming out of the Ways Between)

1. 'Ways Between' should be capitalized.
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2. Looks like this an incomplete sentence. Should end it with something about Farrah, like '... you're brought short by a [waiting shadow/lurking figure/sapphire woman/familar blue woman/etc.]
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3. Should be 'from' instead of 'form'.
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4. Should delete 'between ways'. It doesn't make sense 'you step down from the statue between ways,' Can just be 'statue.' =
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5. While her lips could be a very, very dark blue, I think they're actually black. Or 'onyx' or 'obsidian'.
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Ace Hangman

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Farrah giving a tour of the newly renovated Wayfort

6. While I think most Americans would just call them 'stocks' (I am not getting into pillories or prangers or stocks) and reserve 'stockade' for a wooden wall, either way I think this should be 'any' instead of 'an'.
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7. Demeanor' instead of 'demeanour' using American English. Normally I wouldn't worry if it was the only issue, but if you're already working on the page...

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