Eylo again!
Comma after "to" should be a period, and it looks like there's an extra space after "cock" in the following graf:
I think "face cheek" might be a mistake, and should be "is resting" or "rests:"
Should be "played with:"
Should be "silence it:"
Commas missing after "and" and "moans:"
Misspelling--"deserves:"
Couple of things--should be "now that [you've been reminded of] / [you've remembered] the presence of your own cock," I think, and then a comma after the last word of the phrase ("remembered," if the sentence stays as-is). However, if tied to the current structure, it would need to be "remembered to you," which is pretty archaic, but valid:
Extra space after "cunt," and missing comma after "end:"
In the ass option, should be "Lyla's cock:"
Missing space after "sake;" missing comma before "feeling," and missing line break between the two grafs:
Comma after "to" should be a period, and it looks like there's an extra space after "cock" in the following graf:
I think "face cheek" might be a mistake, and should be "is resting" or "rests:"
Should be "played with:"
Should be "silence it:"
Commas missing after "and" and "moans:"
Misspelling--"deserves:"
Couple of things--should be "now that [you've been reminded of] / [you've remembered] the presence of your own cock," I think, and then a comma after the last word of the phrase ("remembered," if the sentence stays as-is). However, if tied to the current structure, it would need to be "remembered to you," which is pretty archaic, but valid:
Extra space after "cunt," and missing comma after "end:"
In the ass option, should be "Lyla's cock:"
Missing space after "sake;" missing comma before "feeling," and missing line break between the two grafs: