Once more! [Repost because I accidentally put it in the wrong thread!]
Period after "snap" should go within the quotation marks:
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Rest of these are the go down on her option:
"Are slid" should be "slide:"
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"He's" should be "she's on her back:"
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Could argue this is stylistic, but I think this semicolon should be a colon since it introduces the following action:
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Fuck this is so cute. Cut comma after "laughter:"
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Thanks again!
Period after "snap" should go within the quotation marks:
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Rest of these are the go down on her option:
"Are slid" should be "slide:"
View attachment 34941
"He's" should be "she's on her back:"
View attachment 34942
Could argue this is stylistic, but I think this semicolon should be a colon since it introduces the following action:
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Fuck this is so cute. Cut comma after "laughter:"
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Thanks again!