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(Orc Village)(Warrior's Lodge) "the definitely look a little more confident now that they're armed to the teeth" the -> they

(Orc Seers) "and between you and the firepit lay a thick bearskin stretched out" lay -> lays

(Liaden & Sanders) "At least, that certainly seems the fantasy Lia's playing out, the way she clutches her poleaxe" the way she clutches -> with the way she clutches Not sure whether this is an issue or not, but in the scene where Liaden meets Sanders, Shar is there, but I haven't seen any...

(Frostwood)(Near Oxana's house) "pair of lit lanterns[..]hanging from a large wooden arch covered with thick cords of rope that hangs over the trail..." hangs -> hang/dangle OR hangs -> stands hang if you're talking about the ropes, stands if you're talking about the arch; the sentence...

(Old Forest)(Hornet Hive) "though it takes a moment for your friends[party.som|||s] to arrive in the arms" Friends comes out with a double s if you have more than one other in your party. friends[party.som|||s] -> friend[party.som|||s] "rather dark and imposing... better not risk it for now."...

(Liaden)(Hive) "To make sure this hive is irreparable cursed2 irreparable -> irreparably "Laden is the first to come up for air" Laden -> Liaden "The girls eagerly your depths with playfully little circles punctuated by knuckle-deep thrusts" They eagerly _____ your depths "Even still, most...

(Old Forest)(Grainne's grove) "black foliage that seem to teem with life You have to be careful" seem -> seems 'with life. You'

(Painted Demon) "bend in the path, and standing there is a woman, directly on the same path as you." I suggest "bend in the path, and there is a woman standing directly in your way." "and her skin is painted with long, thick, numerous black lines covering her otherwise fair complexion" I think...

(Lyla) "their glister managing to dodge the thick trunk of trees" trunk -> trunks "Since, for all you know, it could all be a trap." Delete the second all. "you say, rising your arms to show your intentions." rising -> raising "You can see remains of her last night campfire" I suggest 'You...

(Clementine) "Wha? O-oh s-sorry, I did it a-again, didn’t I." she blushes Wha? -> What? didn't I. -> didn't I? "but I decided to stake my career in it." in it -> on it "Most of my clothing were average at best" were -> was OR clothing -> clothes "She's kind of vibrating her in chair right...

(Frostwood)(Encounter with the three kitsune) "You turn with a start a voice materialises" a start a voice -> a start as a voice "stop an arm's length from [party.yall], enough to be respectful yet close the distance quickly should the need arise." stop an arm's length from...

(Jae'ly4n) "I just couldn't let [pc.himHer] kill her." Should probably use [pc.Name] rather than [pc.himHer] so that you can avoid "let her kill her" "and then narrowly ruin one of my kid's dresses" narrowly -> almost OR narrowly ruin -> narrowly avoided ruining

Bunch of things I noticed in the text from all over the place. There are quite a lot, so hopefully I'll be presenting it in a way that makes sense.