A crab's gay writings

[orropo]

Sub Nash becomes more attatched to the PC than dom Nash.

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I wanted to get across that he really is quite lonely and the "shady merchant" is mostly a facade. Dom Nash has no reason to drop that facade, sub Nash does in some scenes.

oh okay, thanks for answering, one more question though will dom nash get like any character development(?)(i dont know how else to call it) to drop the facade? just wondering

 

[Knife-wielding Crab]

I am mostly finished with him. People are free to expand on him though.

 

[Knife-wielding Crab]

Done with my editing of Nyze. Will put it up here if anyone feel like helping or give their opinion before I submitt.

Nyze sexpack

 

[valk42]

this is incredible, but just as a first glance, all mentions of bees need to be changed to hornet or another more appropriate wasp-like synonym. will look closer this evening but i love it

 

[Ace Hangman]

Done with my editing of Nyze. Will put it up here if anyone feel like helping or give their opinion before I submitt.

Nyze sexpack

Read through it. Like valk42 said, adjust the bee mention, and the wasp mentions maybe, they aren't too egregious (at least I don't think anyone will come at you with a crab-knife). Other than some typos, I would say my only concern is the Titfuck scene. Obviously I assumed Champ was gonna be doing it, but I was wrong.

He has no tits, so it's more of a Chest Rub thing. I don't have a problem with Champ getting dommy and jerking themselves off on him, but I just didn't 'feel' the parts about him squishing his pecs together to make cleavage. He's always came off as being slender and athletic and very toned. That might just be me and no one else, but it just didn't fit the image of him just being able to hunch his shoulders and make a valley. Again, I don't have a problem with the act, it just feels like it would be more rubbing and grinding on and between his pecs than tit-fucking him. But... I am not a titty-fucking expert... and obviously the totally hot, totally real woman I did that with once or twice with had totally hot, totally real breasts, so my ability to picture it may be faulty.

 

[Knife-wielding Crab]

Read through it. Like valk42 said, adjust the bee mention, and the wasp mentions maybe, they aren't too egregious (at least I don't think anyone will come at you with a crab-knife). Other than some typos, I would say my only concern is the Titfuck scene. Obviously I assumed Champ was gonna be doing it, but I was wrong.

He has no tits, so it's more of a Chest Rub thing. I don't have a problem with Champ getting dommy and jerking themselves off on him, but I just didn't 'feel' the parts about him squishing his pecs together to make cleavage. He's always came off as being slender and athletic and very toned. That might just be me and no one else, but it just didn't fit the image of him just being able to hunch his shoulders and make a valley. Again, I don't have a problem with the act, it just feels like it would be more rubbing and grinding on and between his pecs than tit-fucking him. But... I am not a titty-fucking expert... and obviously the totally hot, totally real woman I did that with once or twice with had totally hot, totally real breasts, so my ability to picture it may be faulty.

I may need to reword the titfuck scene so it is more clear that you're rubbing one out on his chest