So having written a fic, and done a bunch of sketches, I figured it was time to finally try writing something for the game. I decided that writing a scene or two for the Kui Country gloryhole would be a good place to start, since they're pretty simple and don't need the parser much. I had a whole bunch of ideas, some of which I may get to later (hence the thread title) but here's the one I went with first:
Beta Nyrea Glory Hole
It's basically a completed first draft right now, I would greatly appreciate any suggestions or editing that anyone has.
A couple of specific questions that occur to me:
1. It's solely an oral giving scene, so like I said, there's very little scope for the parser. Is it still too little?
2. Do I speak too much for the player? I know that once you're in a sex scene it's a bit more acceptable to do that but I'd still like to know.
General comment on writing style and content also welcomed.
Beta Nyrea Glory Hole
It's basically a completed first draft right now, I would greatly appreciate any suggestions or editing that anyone has.
A couple of specific questions that occur to me:
1. It's solely an oral giving scene, so like I said, there's very little scope for the parser. Is it still too little?
2. Do I speak too much for the player? I know that once you're in a sex scene it's a bit more acceptable to do that but I'd still like to know.
General comment on writing style and content also welcomed.