[WIP] Tavros Station Beauty Parlour

[easykiln]

It's kinda early but I have zero experience writing so I thought I would post this up now and maybe get feedback to fix my mistakes before I make more. 

Concept is a beautician service that involves cum based treatments to raise sexiness and femininity for a set time. Mostly an excuse to write the owner, who is an aloof sort of dom who literally bathes in cum and won't let you penetrate her but is willing to milk your cock in exchange for your cum. Also a cock milker.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hA63m3ucFNwUt59ygfJOvzRk4-oWk9Uf6RNIkskDTgc/edit?usp=sharing

 

[easykiln]

Bumping this because I really do need feedback on the nozzle fuck scene I wrote. Porn is hard. Also it no longer qualifies as an early WIP so I thought it might catch more eyes now.

PS: I am pretty thick skinned, I want to know if it sucks.

 

[Fisto]

Keep at it Ez

 

[ShySquare]

Looks really interesting. Keep it up bro/girl/dude !

 

[easykiln]

I switched the file because it turns out posting porn on your general google account is a bad idea. Sorry for the inconvenience.

 

[Savin]

I switched the file because it turns out posting porn on your general google account is a bad idea. Sorry for the inconvenience.

Worked out alright for me so far >_>

 

[Tenacious_Tiddy]

Google and porn mix. I sometimes use the former to find the latter... *clears throat*

 

[Woider]

Google and porn mix. I sometimes use the former to find the latter... *clears throat*

Personally prefer Tumblr for porn. Though it's nice to use the "search image on google" to find higher resolution or uncensored versions. (The internet really is for porn.)

 

[Milkman]

Bing is the better engine for finding porn though. Google is better for most applications but for smut Bing is king.

 

[Fisto]

Don't derail this thread <_<

 

[Tenacious_Tiddy]

Don't derail this thread <_<

*laughs maniacally* not necessarily trying to, just stated an opinion based on something that someone else said, everyone else brought they're favorite browser to show and tell. (Though i did start it, so part of the blame might be mine. >,>)

But getting us back on topic with the salon. It sounds awsome, anything to add more kink. Also kinda reminds me of the goblin hair salon in CoC based on what ive read so far. Would love to see someone try to implement it into the game. Also cum baths (i feel) aren't a fetish I get to see all that often. plus the whole breeding hose.... very nice touch.

 

[Milkman]

I am pretty interested in that purchasable cock milker as an alternative to the one on New Texas. Especially if it's more like the one in CoC in that it doesn't require anal penetration. It's sort of a shame that she won't be interested in buying exotic cum types as perhaps novelties/ delicacies but oh well.

How portable would the cock milker be? Would it be like the hand milker? Or would it be a machine you install on the ship like the dong designer?

 

[easykiln]

I am going to be taking a bit of a break from this. I was roped into a "write a novel in november" challenge, so I am going to focus on that and come back after with a bunch more experience writing. See you in December.

And yes, the cock milker is a sister product to the magic milker that was a response to some popular mods for the original. It relies on suction and a fairly simple pump-action vibrating ring to induce orgasm rather than a prostate milker that would either make the device significantly bulkier or necessitate two pieces. 

She will never be interested in exotic spunk, but once it is in the game someone will probably end up writing something eventually. For now you will only unlock the ability to buy it if you have standard cum and have seen the scene where she milks you at least once.

 

[Wolffe]

oh yes, this would do nicely - especially now that Tavros Station was recently completed for its upgrades, now making it a larger, Locale-class station (completely making that up, but it'd make sense that they have some sort of categorization system for different-sized artificial sattelites and stations - no need confusing a corvette-sized ship being knocked into a group for battlecruisers because of a lack of proper categorization levels....), allowing for the Salon owner to now not just be able to afford a storefront, but actually have a storefront to rent!

 

[Triblex]

It's definitly a nice project but since it's about bathing in cum wouldn't it be a perfect fit to make some dialogue tweaks here and there for treated/bimbo Steeles? Just as a suggestion the rest looks very interesting so keep it up.

 

[easykiln]

So, no promises(because I never manage to keep them and feel bad), but I have always been kinda bothered that I never finished this and have been revisiting it over the last few days. Mostly just edits for now, but re-familiarizing myself with it. I did leave it to sit for two years after all...

 

[XBoxMaster131]

Good for you, man! Best of luck!