[WIP] Lilly the cute Kaithrit girl

[Cooldudesteve]

My doc is a work in progress. I almost cancelled it because I was too lazy, but now since I think about it, I decided to go back to work.
Link:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b4L1ucgY1yWAOlDjeNvF5YRIg5FdLCICCNH-nL74W9A/

Update 1: fix some typos and errors. also, finished with get oral and give oral as I'm going to work on 69 and probably on breastfeed too.

Update 2: I view some TiTS docs and use the TiTS parser for some help and information I can get. Though I am still confused and perplexed about the doc and the work I did is pretty frustrating and complex that I have no experience making a document about a character. It's actually my first time making one. I will be accepting suggestions for any typos and mistakes I make. If any of you like or dislike my doc, I will respect your opinion.

Update 3: I remove 69 because it was sort of complicated and complex, so I scrap it.

Update 4: I redone the parents option because it has some complexity grammar and some typos.

Update 5: I remove "Cute" and "Shy" for it can be easy and less confusing. I also redone the overview scene.

Update 6: I rework the family scene because I feel like it was out of place.

Update 7: I'm reworking and adding some tweaks in the doc

Update 8: Added the new date scene, though it's still on WIP

Update 9: Added a map base on Lilly spawn area

Update 10: I removed the date scene since it was uninterested for me

Update 11: I removed the niceness meter since it didn't made since to me

Update 12: I added tooltips to each interactions the player picks

Thank you!

 

[OofS]

My doc is a work in progress. I almost cancelled it because I was too lazy, but now since I think about it, I decided to go back to work.
Link:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b4L1ucgY1yWAOlDjeNvF5YRIg5FdLCICCNH-nL74W9A/

Not to come off rude, but this character sounds like an exact copy of Fisianna. She’s a cat girl, she’s shy, loves to play video games, works in the tech specialist field and lives on Tarvos. Also, “egg bearing hips”? I’m pretty sure kaithrits don’t lay eggs...

This part got me laughing.

“I Like to eat ramen noodle soup and eat mershey with nuts. I also like to watch anime and read manga and comics.” Wow. She seems to be a Fan of anime, manga and comics.

Yes, wow indeed. Jokes aside, this character is very basic and boring at this state. I think you should flesh out the character’s personality and introduction first before going all out with the back story and sex scenes. You also need to do a lot of corrections on your sentences. There’s a lot of unnecessary upper casings and misspelled words.

 

[Cooldudesteve]

Not to come off rude, but this character sounds like an exact copy of Fisianna. She’s a cat girl, she’s shy, loves to play video games, works in the tech specialist field and lives on Tarvos. Also, “egg bearing hips”? I’m pretty sure kaithrits don’t lay eggs...

This part got me laughing.



Yes, wow indeed. Jokes aside, this character is very basic and boring at this state. I think you should flesh out the character’s personality and introduction first before going all out with the back story and sex scenes. You also need to do a lot of corrections on your sentences. There’s a lot of unnecessary upper casings and misspelled words.

I know. But hey, she looks and acts like fisianna Also "egg bearing hips" means that she has big hips and no, kaithrits does not lay eggs. btw, the sex scenes are a little jank aand dumb, but I didn't have any thoughts to begin, so I had to make a quick and simple. Also this is my first time making a doc, so sorry if there any misspells and grammar errors. Anyway I'm taking a break on it and going back to work on my doc. Thanks for your comment and I respect your opinion.