[Submitted] A New Forever Home - Move Frost Pupper to the Wayfort

Ace Hangman

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I read through it. Obviously, most of the stuff here is a mirror and paste of the Cave stuff, so other than one typo 'obedient' from the OG stuff (which you'd already corrected), most of the issues aren't really your fault, mostly legacy stuff like all the 'giantess's' with apostrophe-s instead of s-apostrophe. Otherwise, I pointed out the few typos and occasional parser issues.

My main issue just all the use of 'big' for every adjective, which is generally a weak, bland adjective. (Which I know is just because you mirrored the old scenes). Every other line was 'big' something or other and 'big puppy' every time for Pupper. I know you want to keep the similar scenes close other than adding a bed at the Wayfort instead of the cave. Again, those scenes were before my time. I am not holding them against you, but CTRL-F doesn't lie, maybe a few places in your new scenes could freshen up the adjectives. HugsAlright's original works will still be unaffected as originally written in the Cave.