[Rejected]Mushroom TF

[Preacher]

I um... yeah I have no words for why I did this. Just sorta happened when I saw some mushroom girls and wondered if TITS could benefit from something like this.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1K1tfzOnVPUYn4vlRREUkSQiQuEtxhV5cJ5AsoshtwBk/edit?usp=sharing

 

[Zavos]

This made my day. You have a unique brand of inspiration, one TiTS could only benefit from.

After it gets edited, of course.

 

[GothPastel]

Looks good man!
I'll have an edit pass over it at some point, just not rn.

 

[Crablord]

i was kinda disappointed by this not being the myr fungus infection i've been waiting 3000 years for, but this looks great too

 

[Monster Queen]

This looks great but will it include the ability to replace the PC's nipples with small mushrooms?

 

[Ch0w]

when i think Mushroom i think only about....

Spoiler: Miko from, RIP, battleborn

Spoiler: Funguy from Chrono Cross

Spoiler: or these 2 here

 

[Jongeedubs]

I can see that tongue conflicting with some oral or kissing scenes, but it otherwise looks good

 

[Preacher]

This looks great but will it include the ability to replace the PC's nipples with small mushrooms?

I'm trying to keep it simple for now, not include too much that may turn off the devs.

I can see that tongue conflicting with some oral or kissing scenes, but it otherwise looks good

Could modify it. I suppose one whose tip also ends in many tiny tendrils can also work. Mmm... Decisions.

 

[Monster Queen]

I only wanted to know if you were considering it for the future, I'm sorry if I asked too soon. I do understand that you would want to prioritise getting the project into the game first.

 

[Preacher]

Alright, Ima submit it. Long enough of an editing phase has passed.

 

[Preacher]

Another submission biting the dust due to grammar errors and "stilted" writing. Grammar I can work on, but stilted? I've found out it can either mean lack of flow or overly formal writing, school textbook style.

This is going to be problematic, nay, painful, for I am all about formality. Now that I think about it, butt bugs went through a lot of editors which may have simmered down all aforementioned problems. I'm just going to check that out and see if I can remind myself on what worked from that dusty old tome. It's been a while.
And probably do an entire rewrite of the vast majority of my stuff, or consider the choice of letting the writing hat rest until after I've read some more books... lords have mercy.

 

[SoAndSo]

This is going to be problematic, nay, painful, for I am all about formality.

so is ignacious reilly, the neckbeard archetype 50 years ahead of the game

just read more books fucks sake

 

[Thebiologist]

so is ignacious reilly, the neckbeard archetype 50 years ahead of the game

just read more books fucks sake

You mean those paper things we use to decorate bookshelves? You can read those?! Preposterous.

 

[Evil]

Look, as SoAndSo said, read. Read more books. Read different authors, read different genres. The best way for a writer to learn their trade is to read. Read in order how conversation flows and how action takes place. Learn how they wrote and see why that book got published.

 

[ChromaTaphore]

Read Homestuck.

 

[XBoxMaster131]

If you do not mind, @Preacher , I would like to offer a bit of critique.

The codex entry you wrote reads less like an encyclopedia and more like notes that some researcher took. It just seems far too casual, as opposed to other codex entries which are more akin to formal scientific reports. Perhaps try making it more... analytical. And scientific, and stuff. Idk the right adjectives for it, but you get what I mean! Maybe find an actual fungi encyclopedia and use that as a sort of baseline or inspiration.

Anyway, that's just my bit on it all. Keep up the great work, and best of luck to ya!