Scenes between Champ, Hellhound and Frost Pupper. Can be randomly initiated in the Temple, or at will when both hounds are at the Wayfort.
Hot and Cold
Hot and Cold
[Feedback Requested] Hot and Cold - Hellhound and Frost Pupper
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One question/feedback - if I understand correctly that is - 1 in 5 chance and I'm forced to let frost pup to fuck Kari? I read all scenes, and if i did it correctly (well there are some parsers I'm not sure about) - in all scenes Kari is penetrated by pup - I would like to see a "No" button or opt-out button.
Actually what I would like to see is scenes with switched places
- but I understand that is not the intent here - nevertheless - Frost pup content has a branch of not sharing and just dominating her - I don't think many players, from that position, would appreciated forced sharing other char. IMO simple "No" in between [Watch] [Spitroast] [Facesit & Ride] would be sufficient.
Actually what I would like to see is scenes with switched places
- but I understand that is not the intent here - nevertheless - Frost pup content has a branch of not sharing and just dominating her - I don't think many players, from that position, would appreciated forced sharing other char. IMO simple "No" in between [Watch] [Spitroast] [Facesit & Ride] would be sufficient.
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One question/feedback - if I understand correctly that is - 1 in 5 chance and I'm forced to let frost pup to fuck Kari? I read all scenes, and if i did it correctly (well there are some parsers I'm not sure about) - in all scenes Kari is penetrated by pup - I would like to see a "No" button or opt-out button.
Actually what I would like to see is scenes with switched places
Fair point. I've added a simple 'no' scene that only applies in the temple.
I feel like these should be locked behind you making other choices with these characters - Specifically if you choose to do the Cait? scene with the Frost Pupper and you told Agnimitra to Go For It with Karithea - this would make sense as a natural consequence as you just opened both characters to fucking other characters, willingly. That would satisfy the crowd that doesn't want to see it... and let's be honest the people that would enjoy these scenes probably did both of those too. Haha.
Why not also at wayfort? A lot of people do not enjoy seeing their loved ones fucking someone else. While one can assume that if the player fucked both they would not mind seeing both have a go at each other, that is not always the case.
Some of us only do them because we're really diligent about checking every path for typos and mistakes. That's why Azzy and Liaden are bimbos and my Champ's been with a lot of dudes. And also why best girl Lyric had a penis for a short time.
To improve the game for you weirdos and deviants. You're welcome.
Sorry, Pupper...but you're gonna be getting the hotdog.
Maybe a bit much, instead maybe have there be a "take frost pupper to the temple/wayfort" scene instead of it being random? Opt in or no option aside, think a lot of players don't like when it's kind of just randomly forced on them like, "I didn't sign up for this" kind of reaction. If we bring the frost pupper to the hellhound though... and THEN it becomes a random occurrence (or accessible from either npc's menu, whatever you like best) I think that's the best of both worlds there.
If they don't want to see Kari fucking the pupper at the Wayfort, they should avoid clicking the options that specifically trigger those scenes. The "No" is only for the temple because those scenes have a random chance to trigger.
Besides my critique of the random nature of the submission, I do think you should take time to reread Savin and B's writing of Karithea and how she acts because a big gripe I have with this is that it's a total flip of character. I'd asked others their opinion to make sure I wasn't imagining it before providing this feedback, but I feel the way you have Karithea swooning over the frost pupper makes the champ feel like a third wheel. None of the scenes with other npcs have this feel which makes this jarring to read. I get what you are trying to go with, but honestly it feels more cuckold-esque than voyeuristic/threesome in some areas. This is similar to the issue Azzy and Liaden had which had revisions occur to mitigate that feeling. It's really weird to see her calling you mate but then obviously pining for pupper rocket over you, so I would tone down the interest she has in the frost pupper entirely to more a willingness to share, without modifying the relationship Karithea and champ have for a single set of scenes. That's better left for characters that already fit that narrative (or new ones).
This is not to say I'm not totally for pupper threesome scenes, because I totally am and kudos for you for taking the time to write it out - I just feel like the relationship here should be more like the Champ-SubArona-Etheryn triad bit of content, considering the amount of loyalty and affection Karithea has in most of her content for the father/mother of her pups.
This is not to say I'm not totally for pupper threesome scenes, because I totally am and kudos for you for taking the time to write it out - I just feel like the relationship here should be more like the Champ-SubArona-Etheryn triad bit of content, considering the amount of loyalty and affection Karithea has in most of her content for the father/mother of her pups.
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Looked through the beginning and the first sex scene! This is tight writing--it's active. It's visceral. There aren't many mechanical errors, although I've pointed out a tendency to incorrectly capitalize dialogue tags, and the use of italics when there should only be bolding, even outside of dialogue. (Exceptions made for sound effects.) Most of the rest of my comments are stylistic, and as Ace says, they're one person; use them if they're helpful.
I see what the folks are saying, although I don't have strong feelings about it. It might be worth asking Sav, or you can just see what staff says in review.
I see what the folks are saying, although I don't have strong feelings about it. It might be worth asking Sav, or you can just see what staff says in review.
This is honestly great feedback. I'll take a closer look at Kari's writing (like in her scene with Elthara) and get a clearer idea. Thanks!