[Editors neede] Verusha expac

[Doots]

I'm expanding on Verusha. The expac starts if you've completed all of her talk scenes and fucked her a bunch. She'll leave Tarkus and goes missing for a while, but eventually, you get a message telling you that she's in the medical floor of her company's ship. after visiting her a few times she's released and quits her job as a merc and moves to Tavros. When there you can date her (not that she knows that), fuck her, and convince her to try out some Yoga.

Current sex scenes will be edited to fit tavros and put into an optional menu, and new scenes for when you're her lover which are less focused on domination, and you'll be able to fuck her.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zPgmgcUjjbqdTynLmaR70EgEcA4CarYtGV3NGLo9KPw/edit?usp=sharing

This doc has everything except the dates, and sex which is still to be written.

 

[valk42]

Yeen GF is a wonderful thing, thank you.

 

[Sakuraba]

This appears to be filling the empty cavity in my chest with something..... It appears that this is what I was waiting for this all this time.

That is to say, I cannot wait.

 

[Doots]

Today, I finished writing Verusha expac
It's 119 pages long, includes the old sex scene and a bunch of new ones. repeatable dates you can take her on, and other fun things to do with her.
now I'm going to start editing it, but if you want an early look at it you can find it on https://www.patreon.com/Doots

 

[Doots]

Update, It's been submitted and looked at, It needs some more editing, and while I'm going to attempt to make a second pass at it any help would be appreciated.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zPgmgcUjjbqdTynLmaR70EgEcA4CarYtGV3NGLo9KPw/edit?usp=sharing

 

[Animalistic]

So what specifically do we need to lool for?

 

[Doots]

So what specifically do we need to lool for?

Commas were the main issue pointed out.