Cyber Punk SecOp Scene - A little feedback?

[William.]

There's a concern that I haven't been able to shake recently with regards to the scene I contributed to the Cyber Punk SecOps on Zheng Shi, specifically, [Fuck Her] for the kitty girl. This is a very long scene and the ideas that went into it were inspired by something from Sengoku Rance, a scene wherein Rance tries to fuck a ninja girl and he has to 'disarm' the traps on her body because that game was very, very comical.

But what is bothering me about this right now perhaps the way I approached it.

The scene has two unique lead-ups to the actual sex depending on HP or Lust victory. Those are fine. Then you have the option of drinking her milk or not. I am happy with [Don't Drink], but for [Drink]'ing her milk, well, that is the subject here. I wanted to know how people felt about the [Fuck Her] > [Drink] scenario.

For the most part I think it's an alright scene. All 10,000 words that went into fucking her are supposed to convey a fun, total struggle fuck scenario, the catgirl tries to assert no matter what, and the player tries to assert back.

But at this part during [Drink]:

She teases your flare, her walls clamping down on your cum-tube from top to bottom, preventing even the tiniest drop of pre from emerging. A soundless scream surges up your throat, and you half-whine under her authoritative constraint, feeling the pressure building as a pocket of pre fights against her and your body, only concerned with its own existence. “Going to sit still now? Be a good girl? Or do I need to put the restraint goggles on you?”

“I... I think that’s a good idea...” you mutter, an eye on her sputtering tits. For now, you muse.

The femdom is very strong up to this point I feel, and then I immediately end it by putting the player in the aforementioned position. I've been thinking about rewriting everything that comes after this paragraph, not a whole lot'd have to be redone, but to refocus it towards femdom and maybe end it with the player going on top to cum.

I just wanted to know what others thought if they've participated in this event. Thank you.

 

[marsup]

I agree that the whole feel of the situation went in a completely different direction after that scene and made is sound like she was in charge for the rest of the scene. Still good though.

 

[NerdyBluefox]

Are the Cyberpunk cats available in the public build yet?

 

[William.]

Are the Cyberpunk cats available in the public build yet?

Backers only right now. Public build next week.

 

[NerdyBluefox]

Backers only right now. Public build next week.

Darn. Was hoping to see what kind of dom scenes they had for females.

 

[William.]

You need to have a dick to fuck the big titty cyber kitty's pussy, so it's Femdom in the sense of her domming a man or herm's dong. There aren't any scenes where a female PC is dommed, outside of the VR goggle pornos.

But you can also ride the male SecOp, and one option has you being sort of dommed and fucked into the ground.

 

[Charm]

I for one cannot wait for the plebian release to catch up with your sex kittens. If they are anything like your bored jumpers, it'll likely be a blast. ^.^ (hopefully less sticky-sweaty)

From the small spoiler that was a little further up? Sounds more like a sexy struggle of two warring wills. Hopefully one challenge Steele can overcome in the end and rut 'em into the ground. :>

 

[William.]

It does have a different ending if you're in rut!

 

[Charm]

It does have a different ending if you're in rut!

Ooooo'rlly?

You tease! I'm all worked up now waiting for that pubby release. *^.^*

 

[Darkmuramasa]

It does have a different ending if you're in rut!

This I did not know. Now I must go and read it.

To the topic at hand though. I believe the current scene works rather well, however, if you feel a change is needed I'm most certainly not opposed to it. All your writing so far has been REALLY good imho.

*Ninja vanishes back to the lurking shadows*

 

[William.]

The October Public Patch is open.

As is still this query.

 

[null_blank]

Had to grow a dick for this.

• Acknowledgement of breast size and lactation +1
• Pre-game grope and light makeout session. Great!

Thoroughly satisfied with the [Drink] scene and kind of sets off my fetish for being drugged (thanks SleepyGimp). If my Steele is stupid ditzy enough to start partaking of the fluids from complete strangers (and she is) then I expect that something bad will happen to her eventually. Kind of wish Steele pounded her harder after regaining the upper hand though. It would have been nice if there was an option to let Steele get dommed just like you provided with the male Punk SecOp but it's really not a big deal.

Also, if you keep this up people are going to be asking for a recruitable Punk SecOp waifu...

Now back to farming more Punks for uh, "quality assurance testing".

PS. One negative thing and it has nothing to do with any of your scenes: getting disarmed prevents you from using your weapons, fair enough. But it disables special attacks like carpet grenades and detonation charges. Thematically, that's a bit much don't you think?

 

[William.]

Had to grow a dick for this.

• Acknowledgement of breast size and lactation +1
• Pre-game grope and light makeout session. Great!

Thoroughly satisfied with the [Drink] scene and kind of sets off my fetish for being drugged (thanks SleepyGimp). If my Steele is stupid enough to start partaking of the fluids from complete strangers then I expect that something bad will happen to her eventually. Kind of wish Steele pounded her harder after regaining the upper hand though. It would have been nice if there was an option to let Steele get dommed just like you provided with the male Punk SecOp but it's really not a big deal.

Also, if you keep this up people are going to be asking for a recruitable Punk SecOp waifu...

Now back to farming more Punks for uh, "quality assurance testing".

PS. One negative thing and it has nothing to do with any of your scenes: getting disarmed prevents you from using your weapons, fair enough. But it disables special attacks like carpet grenades and detonation charges. Thematically, that's a bit much don't you think?

[Fuck Her] is my only scene in this Fen-emy encounter

That aside, thank you. With luck, Rats will be my first 100% personal project in the game.

 

[BubbleLord]

[Fuck Her] is my only scene in this Fen-emy

That aside, thank you. With luck, Rats will be my first 100% personal project in the game.

How do I downvote

 

[null_blank]

[Fuck Her] is my only scene in this Fen-emy

Doh! I jsut assumed they forgot to credit everything again. My bad.

 

[KaijuKing]

If this is still relevant, I think a cool scene alteration on the modded kitty would be something similar to the corrupted drider in CoC. Where you win, and you think you have the upper hand, but in this case, choosing to drink gives her the upperhand. And the point where she starts to ride you could go more femdom, where Steele doesn't turn the tables on her and is instead rode into the ground. XD just my two cents.

 

[HugLife]

If this is still relevant

It hasn't been relevant for around five months now dude.

 

[KaijuKing]

It hasn't been relevant for around five months now dude.

Damn, lol sorry. I just recently got a computer again after roughly 8 months. Too little too late.