Character Idea: Cyborg Naleen

Darth_Meow_504

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Continuing my character concept from another thread, now in a proper location! The original can be found at https://forum.fenoxo.com/threads/character-idea-cyborg-naleen.8805/

To summarize, the idea is that the Xenogen lab on Meng'ha captured a naleen and something went wrong, forcing the science doctor there to rebuild her as a half-kitty half-sexbot cyborg whom is subsequently depressed and potentially seeking revenge or assistance or guidance in life or at least some good hot sexings to cheer her up a bit. She'll be sad, sexy, and smart with the whole "robo-kitty-science yummy" thing going for her.

A description:

"On first glance one might think they are looking at a normal naleen, albeit through a blue color filter that washes out her naturally tawny coloration. Instead of her natural vivid red, her hair is a muted blue like gunmetal, her flawless skin a pale bluish white, and even her eyes are a softly glowing blue like those on some models of high-class sexbots. Rather than being naked like her wild sisters, she wears a simple white labcoat that is slightly too big for her frame, open and draped loose, which conceals precious little of her curved and feminine body from view and leaves nothing of her sexual allure to the imagination.

What is most shocking about her, beyond her unusual eyes and coloration, is revealed when the gaze drifts lower, below her womanly hips and tantalizing sex trimmed in the same gunmetal blue hair as that upon her head. There, where the normal reptilian coils of snakelike tail of other naleen would be, she possesses human shaped legs and a fully humanoid body plan. The skin of her lower half, from approximately her waist down, is silvery rather than merely pale white and is clearly a different composition from natural skin and flesh. In fact, it is easily recognizable as the synthetic flesh of a high-end sex android, which combined with the eyes of the same type reveal the truth. Somehow, someway, this naleen is a cyborg, an unnatural and yet attractive blend of catwoman and sexbot. How such a thing could be created is surely beyond the ability of the primitive naleen, and there is certainly quite a story behind those softly glowing eyes to explain it.

Whomever rebuilt her, they did damned good work as the seam between her natural flesh and synthetic is virtually flawless and her artificial bits are integrated perfectly. They also worked to retain her feline themed nature, even if they lost the reptilian half of her in the process. Her ears have silvery microphone membranes on the inner surface, she has sleek monofilament whiskers and her teeth and nails are made of razor sharp, durable silvery alloy. Her single feline tail is tufted with gunmetal blue hair, like the rest of it soft as kitten's fur, and her feet are pawlike and tipped with claws like those on her fingertips. Powerful artificial muscle ripples beneath her flawless skin, and one can only guess at just how deep the enhancements go to what was already a deadly predator. The combination of feline grace and mechanical precision could certainly bring those razor claws to bear with frightening speed, and the air of danger mixes with her sex appeal to create a truly thrilling package of cybernetic feminine felinity.

Returning to her eyes, her gaze is cool as befits both machine and predator, but there is also a laser-sharp intellect behind those artificial eyes as well as a barely concealed darkness, a sadness born of acute knowledge of all she has lost in the transition to what she has become."

Thoughts?
 

Ormael

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I still think make her botom like T-X could be fun plan. If devs agree to this hapening.
 

NotYouNorI

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As much as I like the concept of it, Dr. Haswell seems more the kind of scientist to dispose of a faulty specimen rather than try to save them if he found out something was wrong with them, let alone invest resources in the form of cybernetics in them. Cybernetics aren't even his field of study; he seems more of a geneticist.

Also naleen come in various colors not just the ones of the female naleen we find in the wilderness. And the female naleen we find in the jungle is always one and the same individual.
 

Alabaster Chimes

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Yeah it seems really out of character for Haswell to save a organism. If you really want to do this, you may need to make a different Scientist person to have this idea work.

Also you REALLY should not post your work on the forums, and instead write it in google docs. Otherwise you will not get far with this project.

Otherwise its a rough idea that needs a lot of work. Im sure with time you'll be able to do it though.;)
 
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Lancer

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Perhaps the incident was caught by a visiting news crew, and the good doctor felt a little bit of public pressure to fix the mistake and get some good PR for Xenogen.
 

Alabaster Chimes

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Perhaps the incident was caught by a visiting news crew, and the good doctor felt a little bit of public pressure to fix the mistake and get some good PR for Xenogen.

That still doesnt sound like Haswell. That could happen, but I would rather get more confirmation from Savin or Fenoxo if thats in his character at all.
(Wiki says that they are both the authors)

Haswell is a strange and Mysteriously written character that is hard for me to understand. For all I know he IS someone who crumbles under media backlash and goes out to make the Naleen Terminator. Making a new Doctor would probably be the safest way to avoid character breaking.
 

NotYouNorI

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Though Dr. Byron sounds more like the person to do such a thing, but his intetest lies on myrellion.
 

Darth_Meow_504

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I'm not sure on the whole doctor angle either, first someone suggested that Haswell wasn't the type to just casually cut up a being and put them back together in a different way "For SCIENCE!!!" and so I suggested maybe the tail was cancerous or something and he acted semi-altruistically. Now some are concerned he's not nice enough for that, or that he might not have the necessary skillset. I have no way of knowing, I didn't write Haswell and so as you guys said we'd have to consult the writers to get their input on the subject as to how he'd act in the context of this concept.

Unless, of course, he isn't the one who did the work on her at all. It's possible he had her captured, for whatever reason decided she wasn't what he wanted or needed (again, maybe cancer or injury or other illness) and passed her along to someone else. Maybe he sold her, or traded her for favors or equipment or whatever to someone looking for an alien near-corpse to go all chop doc on. I don't mind whipping up an OC to fill that role with Haswell only acting as a middle-man.

This is still very much a work in progress rough draft idea, I have a decent idea where I want to go with it but I'm flexible in how to get there and what to do with it. I'm really still in the brainstorming phase to be honest, and I appreciate the feedback that helps narrow down concepts. And I very much appreciate the kind words people have had for the concept and the feedback on it. Writers dig that. :)
 
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Ormael

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Xenogen mostly conentrate on dealing with organics so making use of inorganic parts to connect to organic...umm I would see one of Xenogen members be part of at lest two ppl team with other one been specialist in mechanics devices/inorganic stuff.

So Dr. Haswell may only be helping some other npc due to some...um promised profits for him or xenogen from such operation. If not that he indeed would be hard to imagine he will just like that help here.
 

Darth_Meow_504

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I'm thinking with her sexbot parts there has to be some form of Tarkus connection here... pretty easy to hide an operation like an illegal experimentation lab in that massive starship or the endless junkyard. Wasn't there something about people going missing from time to time? Who does the medical cyberization stuff in game now? Some rogue member late of that group could be our missing cyberdoc. I've deliberately modeled her modified appearance on the female Tarkus rogue sexbots, there's no doubt in my mind that's where the parts came from.

Speaking of, isn't Tarkus the only planet without a Joyco medical facility, or am I remembering that wrong?
 

Ormael

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Tarkus is sort of place where everyong dump their unneded stuff making it one huge dumpsite. And even PC landing on some ancient terran colony ship that is slowly fallling apart. Lash and Badger somehow hidden there and living not so bad (till some PC not report Badger to Penny ofc). So that msssing cyberdoc + possible some xenogen doc could as well be on Tarkus with capture and transported off Mhen'ga Naleen to expriment on him/her.