Note: I was creating this post just as the new update launched, so idk if any of these are fixed in it or not.
NPC: Sydian Female, combat loss scene
Problem 1: "Come" in this instance should be "cum".
Problem 2: penis description seems off. Im assuming it's meant to be two separate words "pink prick" but even then the pink description seems unnecessary.
...weakling come inside me," she says, breathing heavily. It sounds like an excuse... and when she exposes her glittering vagina and begins to rub against your throbbing and pinkprick, you know. "But... one little exception can't hurt."
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NPC: Male Raskvel trio combat loss scene
Problem: general grammer for the sentence and im assuming "slavering" is meant to be "salivating"
Suggestion: "you begin salivating and your cunt starts beading moisture in immediate reaction..."
Something pricks your skin and immediately your pulse quickens, your slavering and cunt beading moisture in immediate reaction to the heavy load of chemical aphrodisiac that has just been dumped into your veins.
Male Raskvel continued.
Problem: unnecessary "and".
...his large, glossy cock he can fit into your clinging, tender passage, he picks up the pace, battering his powerful hips into your petite and ass, pile-driving into your deepest sensitive areas once every second like a jackhammer, brusquely using you to push towards his own...
Male Rask Cont.
Problem: unnecessary "it".
A rougher spit-roast it is difficult to imagine but the aphrodisiac high in your veins means that as unwilling and uncaringly used as you are...
Male Rask Cont.
Problem q: unnecessary "and".
Problem 2: unnecessary "as".
He loses the ability to form words as he speeds into his own orgasm, gripping your slender and hips tightly as he clenches up once and with a breathless grunt fills your tunnel with liquid warmth.
Male Rask Cont.
Problem: unnecessary "and"
...you can offer no resistance as they eagerly change positions, fingers drifting over your pebbly nipples and through your black and hair whilst the smallest impatiently insinuates himself in the action...
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NPC: Kiro, initial rescue, anal scene. (Not Anal filled scene)
Problem 1: broken Penis Description.
Problem 2: name displayed above bust image is PC name not the NPC. All other npc encounters have the name of the NPC above them and not the PC.
...and slowly but surely shifting the paired head of your fully engorgedgabilani-dick down toward her nearest hole.
NPC: Sydian Female, combat loss scene
Problem 1: "Come" in this instance should be "cum".
Problem 2: penis description seems off. Im assuming it's meant to be two separate words "pink prick" but even then the pink description seems unnecessary.
...weakling come inside me," she says, breathing heavily. It sounds like an excuse... and when she exposes her glittering vagina and begins to rub against your throbbing and pinkprick, you know. "But... one little exception can't hurt."
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NPC: Male Raskvel trio combat loss scene
Problem: general grammer for the sentence and im assuming "slavering" is meant to be "salivating"
Suggestion: "you begin salivating and your cunt starts beading moisture in immediate reaction..."
Something pricks your skin and immediately your pulse quickens, your slavering and cunt beading moisture in immediate reaction to the heavy load of chemical aphrodisiac that has just been dumped into your veins.
Male Raskvel continued.
Problem: unnecessary "and".
...his large, glossy cock he can fit into your clinging, tender passage, he picks up the pace, battering his powerful hips into your petite and ass, pile-driving into your deepest sensitive areas once every second like a jackhammer, brusquely using you to push towards his own...
Male Rask Cont.
Problem: unnecessary "it".
A rougher spit-roast it is difficult to imagine but the aphrodisiac high in your veins means that as unwilling and uncaringly used as you are...
Male Rask Cont.
Problem q: unnecessary "and".
Problem 2: unnecessary "as".
He loses the ability to form words as he speeds into his own orgasm, gripping your slender and hips tightly as he clenches up once and with a breathless grunt fills your tunnel with liquid warmth.
Male Rask Cont.
Problem: unnecessary "and"
...you can offer no resistance as they eagerly change positions, fingers drifting over your pebbly nipples and through your black and hair whilst the smallest impatiently insinuates himself in the action...
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NPC: Kiro, initial rescue, anal scene. (Not Anal filled scene)
Problem 1: broken Penis Description.
Problem 2: name displayed above bust image is PC name not the NPC. All other npc encounters have the name of the NPC above them and not the PC.
...and slowly but surely shifting the paired head of your fully engorgedgabilani-dick down toward her nearest hole.