[0.7.6] Harvest Valley & Sariel Quest

[teawolf]

When finding a Double Pupperidge Pepper, "there's" should be "there are:"


When encountering the Centaur Pack, comma needed after "spotting you." Short enough phrase it could go without one, usually, but the rest of the sentence is long enough the comma helps:


After defeating the Centaurs, comma missing after "afterwards:"


When meeting Wredi & Edessari at the start of Sariel Quest, "their face" should be "their faces:"


Same scene, should be introduction "to" instead of "with:"


Same scene, comma splice: comma after "anything" should be a semicolon or a colon, and comma missing after "regardless:"


Next scene, strike comma after "and Sariel:"


Extra space after "warmth," and commas after "Goodness" and "lady"--although the rules for dialogue are more flexible:


Missing space between "I" and em-dash:


Same scene, missing comma after "fairy," and "pone" after "golden" should be "pony:"


Cont.

 

[teawolf]

Missing comma after "droops:"


On the Waystone tile in the Centaur Village and the tile south of it (same description), should be "nutrient-rich, cold-resistant food:"


Seeing Taldahs for the first time after freeing the CV from corruption. Missing comma after "face to face:"


Discussing the Behemoth with Taldahs, missing comma after "caused:"

 

[teawolf]

Continuing with SarielQuest, on returning to the Marefolk Village, comma splice in this sentence. Comma after "her" should be a period or an em-dash:


After fighting the boar, missing comma after "if you've noticed:"


In the next scene, period after "with" should be a comma:


When visiting Sariel for the completion of the quest, Sariel'd just stuck her head out of the tent in question, so "the tent" rather than "a tent" seems appropriate?


Thank you!

 

[teawolf]

Should be sorted.