After you give Kiyoko the quarterstaff, I found a little typo.
At the end of paragraph 15, it says "...and it's this you attempt to impress upon your daughter the lesson proceeds, using the apprentice staff as a learning tool."
where it should say something like "...and it's this you attempt to impress upon your daughter as the lesson proceeds, using the apprentice staff as a learning tool."
Not a big deal at all but figured I should start pointing out stuff like this.
Im also kinda new here so sorry if this isn't how I'm supposed to do this.
At the end of paragraph 15, it says "...and it's this you attempt to impress upon your daughter the lesson proceeds, using the apprentice staff as a learning tool."
where it should say something like "...and it's this you attempt to impress upon your daughter as the lesson proceeds, using the apprentice staff as a learning tool."
Not a big deal at all but figured I should start pointing out stuff like this.
Im also kinda new here so sorry if this isn't how I'm supposed to do this.
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