Getting the alchemy kit from Ivris, "set up" should be "setup" to match previous use:
In the same scene, "you pack" should be "your pack:"
Meeting the Harpy Matron, a missing capital on "A":
On the first tile in the Foothills, "colorful windflowers" are mentioned--flagging just in case that's supposed to be "wildflowers."
In the Foothills recovers some health scene, this should be "there's no sign" or "there are no signs:"
Meeting the wyvern drake for the first time, the text uses a lot of different pronouns ("it," "they")--and then "his butt." Is this fluidity on purpose? If not, perhaps change to "its butt" to keep it parallel:
When milking the venom from the wyvern boy, missing "you" before "run your thumb:"
In the same scene, missing capital on "His thighs:"
When approaching the statues in the foothills, "into" should be "in:"
On the third green tile east HT, from I think "do" here should be "be:"
Thanks for everything!!
In the same scene, "you pack" should be "your pack:"
Meeting the Harpy Matron, a missing capital on "A":
On the first tile in the Foothills, "colorful windflowers" are mentioned--flagging just in case that's supposed to be "wildflowers."
In the Foothills recovers some health scene, this should be "there's no sign" or "there are no signs:"
Meeting the wyvern drake for the first time, the text uses a lot of different pronouns ("it," "they")--and then "his butt." Is this fluidity on purpose? If not, perhaps change to "its butt" to keep it parallel:
When milking the venom from the wyvern boy, missing "you" before "run your thumb:"
In the same scene, missing capital on "His thighs:"
When approaching the statues in the foothills, "into" should be "in:"
On the third green tile east HT, from I think "do" here should be "be:"
Thanks for everything!!
