In the Liazzy threesome, seems like the "As though to enunciate..." sentence is half-missing:
In [Ovi Punish] after beating Drag'azzy after sparring, "she" should be lowercase:
Same scene, couple of missing words--I think should be "from [where] the lusty venomous lube spreads over your ring," cutting the "is":
In the Viviane Strap-on scene, the comma after "like" should go in the single quotes:
Same scene, second page, period should go inside the single quotes:
In [Ovi Punish] after beating Drag'azzy after sparring, "she" should be lowercase:
Same scene, couple of missing words--I think should be "from [where] the lusty venomous lube spreads over your ring," cutting the "is":
In the Viviane Strap-on scene, the comma after "like" should go in the single quotes:
Same scene, second page, period should go inside the single quotes: