[Talk] > [Komari]
Given the lack of quotation marks and that this is Champ talking, I'm not sure this was meant to be italicized. It doesn't feel like this whole sentence should be receiving that much emphasis.
[Intimate Sex]
Possible oversight? In the document in Jstar's submission thread, if Champ has multiple tails, this generates "as your tails wag ever faster and your ears start to instinctively flatten." Evidently there's no support for PC having a single tail, such as if they're catfolk/lupine/vulperine/whatever. This may be intentional, in which case, please ignore.
[Vigorous Sex]
Too many hands.
Redundancy with the phrase "in his eyes."
This isn't really a typo so much as it is a nitpick, but technically this is not grammatically correct - it should be "you and he," not "you and him." The best way to tell is that, if you removed "you and" from the sentence, it would be "he rolls around on the floor," not "him rolls around on the floor."
Given the lack of quotation marks and that this is Champ talking, I'm not sure this was meant to be italicized. It doesn't feel like this whole sentence should be receiving that much emphasis.
[Intimate Sex]
Possible oversight? In the document in Jstar's submission thread, if Champ has multiple tails, this generates "as your tails wag ever faster and your ears start to instinctively flatten." Evidently there's no support for PC having a single tail, such as if they're catfolk/lupine/vulperine/whatever. This may be intentional, in which case, please ignore.
[Vigorous Sex]
Too many hands.
Redundancy with the phrase "in his eyes."
This isn't really a typo so much as it is a nitpick, but technically this is not grammatically correct - it should be "you and he," not "you and him." The best way to tell is that, if you removed "you and" from the sentence, it would be "he rolls around on the floor," not "him rolls around on the floor."
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