Approach > Sex > Breed (in Rut)
1. Should maybe be the 'release of relief' or the 'relief of release' instead of 'relief of relief'
2. Should either be 'flushed skin hot against' or 'hot skin flush against', either one.
3. 'pulls'
Approach > Sex > Wear Dress
4. 'your'
5. 'Alright' instead of 'All right'.
6. Should be 'she is' instead of 'she's'. While it's a contraction of 'she is' it would only work if placed before the predicate, like 'She's lovely in the dress.' It reads strangely where it is.
7. Should be 'it's' with an apostrophe 's. Contraction of 'it has'.
8. Should be 'let's' with an apostrophe 's. Contraction of 'let us'.
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9. Should be a space here. Likely a parser issue.
10. Remove 'your'.
1. Should maybe be the 'release of relief' or the 'relief of release' instead of 'relief of relief'
2. Should either be 'flushed skin hot against' or 'hot skin flush against', either one.
3. 'pulls'
Approach > Sex > Wear Dress
4. 'your'
5. 'Alright' instead of 'All right'.
6. Should be 'she is' instead of 'she's'. While it's a contraction of 'she is' it would only work if placed before the predicate, like 'She's lovely in the dress.' It reads strangely where it is.
7. Should be 'it's' with an apostrophe 's. Contraction of 'it has'.
8. Should be 'let's' with an apostrophe 's. Contraction of 'let us'.
Next
9. Should be a space here. Likely a parser issue.
10. Remove 'your'.
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