Milk Stinger
1. Should be 'your' instead of 'her'.
2. Okay, not really a typo, so I don't expect you to fix it without B's permission. It's just that her hands are clad in black chitin. I don't see them turning white. I could see maybe 'you imagine if they weren't clad in black chitin they would be turning white' or 'her knuckles would be turning white if they weren't black chitin'.
Just mentioning it.
3. Seems like a missing sentence or extra period here.
SelfBreastFeed
4. Should be 'formerly' instead of 'formally'.
1. Should be 'your' instead of 'her'.
2. Okay, not really a typo, so I don't expect you to fix it without B's permission. It's just that her hands are clad in black chitin. I don't see them turning white. I could see maybe 'you imagine if they weren't clad in black chitin they would be turning white' or 'her knuckles would be turning white if they weren't black chitin'.
Just mentioning it.
3. Seems like a missing sentence or extra period here.
SelfBreastFeed
4. Should be 'formerly' instead of 'formally'.
