[WIP] Estne Verebrundy, The Hermaphrodite Mephitian Candymaker

[Yulaur_the_Small]

Not to long ago, I decided to start writing stuff for TiTS, thinking it would be fun to flex my creative muscles again, which were pretty much atrophied from underuse since graduating highschool.

First, I made a race as a baseline for other projects to come, and was told by some that it wasn't the best idea to do so.

Regardless, I decided to go through with trying to post it. It didn't get much attention, and on the doc, a certain creator told me that races with no sort of sexable content weren't being accepted at this time. Seeing as I already had plans for it and was done with the foundation, I decided to begin working on a character to go along with that race. This is that character. So, let me introduce you to;

Estne, A Hermaphrodite Mephitian Candymaker.

(Warning: Content includes stuff like; Cumflation, Futadom, Fetishwear, Stripteasing, etc.)

 

[Yulaur_the_Small]

So, it's been a month since I posted this.

I'll be honest, I was expecting a little feedback on it, but oh well...

I might as well give it some more time to be viewed by people, and hopefully enough people will see it so that I can hopefully post something later about extra ideas I had for the character, you know, more content. Maybe a poll?

Ah, anyways, I was just checking in. I have less time now overall because of a new day job, but I plan on writing things during my free time if I have any ideas.

As for now, that is all.

 

[Nino]

If you want feedback from the developers, it would be best to submit it to them

 

[Yulaur_the_Small]

If you want feedback from the developers, it would be best to submit it to them

Not the developers, but from other members of the community.

Isn't the whole point of the "Ideas" subforum getting feedback from those who read the posts?

 

[TheIrishOtaku]

Not the developers, but from other members of the community.

Isn't the whole point of the "Ideas" subforum getting feedback from those who read the posts?

The ideas subforum is used either for gauging interest in stuff that you intend to write or coming up with purely mechanical suggestions really. Stuff like characters should be posted in the event submissions subforum. Honestly, the ideas subforum shouldn't even exist as barely anybody uses it for its intended purpose.

 

[Yulaur_the_Small]

The ideas subforum is used either for gauging interest in stuff that you intend to write or coming up with purely mechanical suggestions really. Stuff like characters should be posted in the event submissions subforum. Honestly, the ideas subforum shouldn't even exist as barely anybody uses it for its intended purpose.

This is where I was told to post it if I wanted any feedback by another user.

I just wanted some constructive criticism before I posted it with the intent to get it added to the game.

 

[TheIrishOtaku]

This is where I was told to post it if I wanted any feedback by another user.

I just wanted some constructive criticism before I posted it with the intent to get it added to the game.

They told you to post it in the wrong place then. I've gotten two sets of scenes into the game and both times I used events submissions. You'll probably have better luck there, although bear in mind Trials is kind of in an undead state compared to CoC2 on here so that's probably partly why nobody has really given any feedback and its possible you won't get much more even if you do post there. I only got feedback on my first set of scenes and that was mostly from one person, the second nobody really did. For what its worth though I made a small suggestion on it and I think on the whole its very good. My advice would be easing up on putting words in Steele's mouth so often. People sort of prefer more of a blank slate to rp with, although its probably not that big of a deal from what I've seen of other writers work. To be clear, you post there as a WIP and then when you think its ready you submit it using the google doc.

 

[XBoxMaster131]

Trials is kind of in an undead state compared to CoC2 on here

reading this physically hurt me.

sigh

 

[Yulaur_the_Small]

Ease up on Steele's dialogue? Alright, I'll add that to the notes.

I want to make this as good as I can, and I just wanted feedback because I doubt I could think about every possibility when it comes to writing.

Edit: Btw, I think the one who told me to post it here was @Wafflesnake

 

[Nino]

Ease up on Steele's dialogue? Alright, I'll add that to the notes.

The alternative editorial choice is to make up to (and possibly more) 3 sets for Steele's personality modes whenever they have to react and respond to actions. The possibly more refers to traits like SnakeByte, Bimbo, Cum Addiction, etc.

 

[TheIrishOtaku]

The alternative editorial choice is to make up to (and possibly more) 3 sets for Steele's personality modes whenever they have to react and respond to actions. The possibly more refers to traits like SnakeByte, Bimbo, Cum Addiction, etc.

Yeah that's what I did for my scenes, I had dialogue for the kind, hard, mischievous, bimbo and bro personalities a couple of times per sex scene.