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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.also the inverse issue i think with one of the other lab names -
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.There has been no previous mention of a lever, nor any metals or colorful liquids, so maybe change the first "the" to "a" and remove the...
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.maybe replace "runs" with "plays", and change the last bit to "covers her eyes and upper face" “No idea,” Paulette murmurs, shaking...
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.maybe remove this section and change "grins" to "sneers" Paulette grins, mostly to show her fangs, pure wrath in her eyes.
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.maybe add "in the present day" at the end order to better indicate what is occoring and help readers make the mental connections at a...
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.maybe change to "turns her display off" or "turns her visor off" or "puts her visor up" or something along those lines The purple...
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.change to the word three Slowly, she opens one of the video files from day 3.
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.change to punishment For some reason, something blocks her punishments and termination subroutines.
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.change to "floats down to the console" Dabbebieth floats down the console and slides the magnetic card into the receiver.
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.forgot to italicize it here
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.Maybe change to "desperate struggle" It wasn’t torn by arachnoid limbs in a fight for life nor blasted by a lucky shot.
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PanzerGuitar00 replied to the thread Typos and Etc 2: Electric Boogaloo!.maybe remove the highlighted first section and then combine the two sentences, as well as changing puppet to puppets and removing the...
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BI've gotten almost full way through his quest, im just trying to find Him on Iveto, I've already found him once, but I lost, the wiki...
