[WIP] COC2's first Bearfolk encounter

[bubblechaser]

Hi was writing an event submission for a bearfolk and noticed theres no CODEX entry for Bearfolk so I made one. I realize this is not an event, but it is in preparation for one. If I'm doing something wrong let me know.

Ive P.M.'d Jayo, the creator of the Ursus bulb, the bearfolk transformation item, but still waiting for his response.

Pretty new to the Forum here but not to COC2. I plan on doing some smaller things inbwetween this and the Bearfolk encounter reveal, to build my credibility here and to learn the ropes of how to write an event/use parsers/etc... before the Grizzly Lumberjack i have in mind makes his debut (Kasyrra willing!)

toodles/enjoy!
BubbleChaser ~<3


PS: PM me I wont bite!

PPS: aw shit i forgot heres the link

Bearfolk

docs.google.com

 

[TheIrishOtaku]

Honestly, I think the way you wrote this up is a little too ''memey'' in style. I know this is a porn game but the other codex entries keep to a more encyclopaedia like tone while this is riddled with jokes and innuendo. Its distracting and not to be mean but a little cringe. Also it has some spelling and grammar mistakes that you really should fix. The lore itself is interesting and I don't see anything egregious on that score. I really think you should have waited on submitting this though as it clearly needs a lot of work.

 

[bubblechaser]

Honestly, I think the way you wrote this up is a little too ''memey'' in style. I know this is a porn game but the other codex entries keep to a more encyclopaedia like tone while this is riddled with jokes and innuendo. Its distracting and not to be mean but a little cringe. Also it has some spelling and grammar mistakes that you really should fix. The lore itself is interesting and I don't see anything egregious on that score. I really think you should have waited on submitting this though as it clearly needs a lot of work.

i was wondering about that (jokes) - yeah i'll absolutley remove jokes if its not normal and i continue to hear that from at least one other person. this is my first submission for anything so im not familiar with the process; wasnt aware that [submitted] meant final version- so i can put [WIP] instead? alright - please mark the grammar and spelling if you can, that would be helpful. I apreciate you're not being mean, thank you.