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XBoxMaster131

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Im baaaaaaaack!!!!


The defender holds his shield forward, braced before him as an ominious hum quickly builds behind it.but the damage is done; she’s standing over you and smiling, her enormous cock growing more erect by the second.
 

XBoxMaster131

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messed up quotation marks here. And maybe also italics? Idk, use your own descretion

The short, freckled local shrugs. “They’re the Ripe Skins. Local gang. There’s loads of ‘em and new ones pop up all the time. They’re everywhere these days. If there’s a city block to claim, you’d better believe somebody’s claimed it.”

Surely the authorities try to keep things safe? Won’t they be along soon?”

The zaika laughs mirthlessly. “The Zaibatsu don’t care what happens here, as long as they and their investments aren’t messed with. No police, no authorities. Half the gangs are just locals trying to defend against the other half.”
 

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replace your with you're

Her cock is warm in your mouth, and with Sherra sucking you off below you don’t even notice the fact your laying down in a snowdrift.
 

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maybe capitalize "so"

Your head swims from the warmth along your shiny schlongs, and you only manage one dry-hump before she shoulder tackles you back into the wall again. “Sit the fuck still!” she growls, so I can suck your dicks raw!”
 
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