Twin Serpent (Update)

[Redfox26011]

The race still isn't fully finished, but I've kinda run into a wall and for now I think it's complete until I can come up with other ideas for it that I'll add in. If anyone has ideas or suggestions feel free to say so! Please be kind it's my first real attempt at making a race

https://docs.google.com/document/d/167OkHJ3VUw1QJKLzLETL3-jQ9Y9T2jjex9yPOkc2jXA/edit

 

[Thebiologist]

The writing is alright, better than most people's first project attempt, the only problems I see are related to the basic concept.

First of all, there are already cuntsnakes, making a second cuntsnake "mutation" would be a bit repetitive.
Second: Cuntsnakes are already borderline bestiality, which is a banned topic, but since they were introduced very, very early during development they get a free pass and we all pretend not to notice, but getting a blowjob by a literal snake, that might be a bit of a problem.
Third: Rules are, new PC genital types require 8 sex scenes minimum to make it in-game.

Don't let my comment discourage you from writing it anyways, finishing a project is always a good way to acquire experience.

 

[DrMostlySane]

The writing is alright, better than most people's first project attempt, the only problems I see are related to the basic concept.

First of all, there are already cuntsnakes, making a second cuntsnake "mutation" would be a bit repetitive.
Second: Cuntsnakes are already borderline bestiality, which is a banned topic, but since they were introduced very, very early during development they get a free pass and we all pretend not to notice, but getting a blowjob by a literal snake, that might be a bit of a problem.
Third: Rules are, new PC genital types require 8 sex scenes minimum to make it in-game.

Don't let my comment discourage you from writing it anyways, finishing a project is always a good way to acquire experience.

I don't think your second point will really hold because of the addition of the Sandworms, which is literally you fucking / getting fucked by giant insects.

 

[Redfox26011]

If anyone could offer help in creating scenes for this I would be deeply grateful

 

[Preacher]

I don't think your second point will really hold because of the addition of the Sandworms, which is literally you fucking / getting fucked by giant insects.

It did take some work to get those in, though. Quite the editing montage I'll tell you that.

If anyone could offer help in creating scenes for this I would be deeply grateful

The problem is that it's not really that distinct enough of a parasite to spark the imagination for a lot of scenes. At its core it's essentially just another tip for the cuntsnake parasite. If you do plan on having distinct masturbation scenes for each genital configuration archtype then you'll need one for herms as well. There are some scenes that come to mind but this forum and the game won't allow it since it falls well into the banned fetishes list unfortunately, vore essentially. If you think about it the scene where it consumes your existing parasite tail does just that so you may want to do a few edits. Maybe something along the lines of the venom forcing the bonds between you and your current parasite to separate so that it can takes its place.

You could try some of these ideas for scenes unless don't mind waiting on charity:
1. Your tail being breastfed by a lactating player character.
2. A tail makeout session that may or may not end up in them deepthroating the pc with their head.
3. An encounter with a random rusher that is curious enough about your tail to ask you if it's safe for it to suck people off, at which point you can offer it to them.
4. Snake rimjob, may or may not end up in an ass full of snake.
5. Have your snake tail perform the job in the gloryholes instead of you.
6. I don't know if you were planning on this for the female mast scene but it could follow the same flavor as number 4.

 

[Redfox26011]

It did take some work to get those in, though. Quite the editing montage I'll tell you that.

The problem is that it's not really that distinct enough of a parasite to spark the imagination for a lot of scenes. At its core it's essentially just another tip for the cuntsnake parasite. If you do plan on having distinct masturbation scenes for each genital configuration archtype then you'll need one for herms as well. There are some scenes that come to mind but this forum and the game won't allow it since it falls well into the banned fetishes list unfortunately, vore essentially. If you think about it the scene where it consumes your existing parasite tail does just that so you may want to do a few edits. Maybe something along the lines of the venom forcing the bonds between you and your current parasite to separate so that it can takes its place.

You could try some of these ideas for scenes unless don't mind waiting on charity:
1. Your tail being breastfed by a lactating player character.
2. A tail makeout session that may or may not end up in them deepthroating the pc with their head.
3. An encounter with a random rusher that is curious enough about your tail to ask you if it's safe for it to suck people off, at which point you can offer it to them.
4. Snake rimjob, may or may not end up in an ass full of snake.
5. Have your snake tail perform the job in the gloryholes instead of you.
6. I don't know if you were planning on this for the female mast scene but it could follow the same flavor as number 4.

Those ideas are all Awesome! I think I could do a few of those! Thank you for that!