[Submitted] Evergreen Barney Location

[Melon_ear]

Taking suggestions and critique

Evergreen - Better Better Way

 

[Knife-wielding Crab]

I read it and left some coments. Not a native speaker so I kept away from grammar. It's mostly from a storytelling perspective so most of it are opinions and not facts.

 

[teawolf]

Added grammar comments before I found it was in the queue already--! Sorry / maybe they're helpful?

 

[Karakara]

Cait ain't PCs lover even when they fucked at that point.

There is some awkward wording here and there, but I appreciate the option you are presenting here.