[Submitted] Elf boy 69 scene

[danielxcutter]

I decided to write an additional scene for the elf boy you can meet in the Old Forest.

Elfboi69

docs.google.com

It's a 69 scene with you also fingering his butt.

It's my first attempt, so constructive criticism and advice is welcome!

 

[Animalistic]

Oh, nice, you are picking up my slack when it comes to writing something for the elf boy.
Overall, for your first submission, I do not think there is anything that would really prevent it from being accepted; or at least nothing major if I can trust my newbie eyes. It is short and sweet which is perfect when it comes to not scaring off the editors.
Maybe some more usage of parsers here and there, but that is all that I can really comment on here.
I left some comments on the doc, so I hopr they help.