Sea Monster Bites : Attempt 3

[leomax]

Hey, back again. Rejected. Though the rejection came with suggestions from fen himself on the doc.

I took those suggestions. And went through the whole thing again combing through what were problems. Run on sentences, a lot of the same words used in the same descriptions, spelling grammar issues ect.

And I'm back again, another attempt.

Edit. Submitting it again

 

[Chaosstripe]

This is neat, but links to the past attempts would be appreciated as I have no idea what this actually is about. Still though, congrats for keeping with it and I hope it gets in.